god'swife
on Ga-go, Part two of that same play, the suspensefull climax. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
12 Jun 2003, 8:07 AM
Keep going.
wEdible Underpantsw
on Ga-go, Part two of that same play, the suspensefull climax. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
12 Jun 2003, 7:53 AM
I couldn't be bothered to read this, but I'm going to give you 6 points on a whim.
An equinox idiot.
but still dusking? this makes little sense.
Apart form that its good. 6
I agree Robert a 6 is fair. I wrote this a while ago and I wish I found this site when most of my work was written because i rate critique as it improves you as a writer so thanks for your comment.
Please tell me the lines you liked and the ones that are a waste of time.
nicely done.
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isn't Olde English a leather treatment or furniture polish?
give a whole now meaning to "deep impact"
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search for something more palpable and less ordinary.
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another good smurf haiku, but the punctuation should go away.
ABSOLUTELY. bravo. Huge difference that adds to the impact of the poem.
P.S. I apologize about my comments being fraught with typographical errors.
Robert K Foster
on Ga-go, Part two of that same play, the suspensefull climax. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
12 Jun 2003, 5:09 AM
I think you should've posted this to playranker.com instead.
How very hairy potter.
tends to ramble.
Grandfather's Proverb (Haiku) by -=Dark_Angel=-
In his shaving vest
Grandfather is more than old:
He's a lunatic.
Heeker? please explain its meaning
Utter Bollocks