Felzpoet
replying on Hardest Thing by Felzpoet
18 May 2003, 6:07 PM
lsitin buddy i dont know who u think u messin wit but it definately the wrong person get tht straight call me a kid again ull wish u were never born
On second thought, sometimes I'm just too kind. (How's THAT for arrogance?)
Hey listen up Felchpoet: you wanna play in the big leagues, you gotta play hard ball. Ain't nobody round here gonna cut you a break 'cos you're a rookie - there's only cool-cats and hipsters that make it big in this business. You gotta problem, kid, I suggest you take it up with your mommy. Now beat it!
why.
The breathy bits are okay, but this piece needs some clearasil, STAT!
(Don't mind the arrogance, it's just the thing to do) ;)
Thank you john and i will take that into consideration
Hey brain dead at least i can spell the word poem
Not tht u'll ever get close enough to someone to feel the way i do but thnx for the comments
Anchors away.
Mr -=Dark_Angel=-, I have returned with some gifts from my recent outing.
For the Tughampton boy'
A Bona-Fide, Roger D. Wilco, gold plated, electrified,
wheeled chair.
For Mrs. Tughampton,
A Rouge velveteen feathered hat.
And for you, a new shooter. For marbles.
Yep, that's what I see too. Just checking.
I see a poeme.
but wait... what's that? something seems to be slowly diffusing out of the mangled heap of mediocre literature that has been carelessly splattered all over my screen... it... it seems to be made of skin... it can't be... no! Oh God no! AAARRRGHHH *ppppt *gagh*
END OF TRANSMISSION
Gentlemen, we have a situation here.
Sick.
What do you see when you read this poem?
The only thing I can say is wow. One of the greatest things I've ever read. The only flaw I could fine is you rhymed the same words multiple times. Other then that I think it's great. Definetely would work as a song (10)
not bad to much of a dark under tone for me keep writting it suits u quite well
You may be right, my friend.
This has currently only got one comment-mine-and I really can't see that changing. However I would urge everybody who read it to vote it a zero; who knows we might just get this one an average of 0.00
Let me lead the way.