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elizabethann replying on lost by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 4:14 PM
And I'm not sure that you should ...
Blindproject217 on lost by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 4:13 PM
Not sure what u mean
horus8 on Blue Fuckin' Moon by lastobelus 17 Mar 2003, 4:12 PM
Beginning's okay, middle starts to shimmy a bit, but then pow. good show, could use a re-edit to get the tens though. here's an 8.
Blindproject217 on While flipping over stones by <{Baba^Yaga}> 17 Mar 2003, 4:10 PM
I like it
Blindproject217 on untitled by angel_uy 17 Mar 2003, 4:09 PM
Awesome
horus8 on The Breathing Dead by Caducus 17 Mar 2003, 4:08 PM
you might have a too, or a to, crossed, but that's trendy, and kool too.
Blindproject217 replying on Tell me I suck by Blindproject217 17 Mar 2003, 4:06 PM
hahah ok
horus8 on the salt shaker by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 4:05 PM
But can you play the marimba naked?
horus8 on untitled by angel_uy 17 Mar 2003, 3:48 PM
Sir, how dare ye just give the secret confusion poem formula over like this. You have besmirched your last hoof. The time has come to put our feet down. lol.
elizabethann replying on the salt shaker by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 3:41 PM
thanks for the tip - i like "eating at the lining" better than what i had before.
lastobelus on the salt shaker by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 3:37 PM
better. I like it. one thing jars for me: "eating away the lining" The image of drinking tears is quite vivid for me, and plausible enough that I want to imagine it being true, that you do literally drink the tears. I want to put myself in the poem and vicariously feel the salt burning my throat. But then, if they ate away the lining of your stomach, you'd be dead and unable to have written the poem. By being TOO strong, it disassociates me, throws me out of the poem. See what I mean? If I were editing this poem, I would change away to at, "eating at the lining". Then I can still vicariously experience it. Lots of people might disagree with me though, some people like their images and metaphors as over-the-top as you can make 'em.
horus8 on Tell me I suck by Blindproject217 17 Mar 2003, 3:23 PM
Lagniappe, is the word of the week, not suck.
lastobelus on While flipping over stones by <{Baba^Yaga}> 17 Mar 2003, 1:57 PM
love it muchly
<~> on While flipping over stones by <{Baba^Yaga}> 17 Mar 2003, 1:02 PM
hmm. not the cock i have been thinking on, but i can see how it works better for the poem that way. :|
<{Baba^Yaga}> replying on While flipping over stones by <{Baba^Yaga}> 17 Mar 2003, 12:58 PM
That should be better.
<~> on While flipping over stones by <{Baba^Yaga}> 17 Mar 2003, 12:13 PM
dammit! again, you miss the chance for the rhyme!!!!!
<~> on Heirlooms by Bachus 17 Mar 2003, 12:05 PM
dammit. i was looking for 'cocks' to rhyme with 'clocks.' and you get all serious on me.
<~> on Orders to My Zombie Legions by razorgrin 17 Mar 2003, 11:37 AM
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razorgrin on The deafening silence in the world or something by Bachus 17 Mar 2003, 11:22 AM
Depeche mode is fucking awesome.
lastobelus replying on lost by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 10:59 AM
really? What is the consensus on the meaning of "that were never there"? 9/11 never happened, it was a media conspiracy? A mass hallucination by New Yorkers? It's as if they were never there because everybody's forgotten? What does it MEAN elizabethann? I think it's bullshit. Gratuitous. An cheap attempt to allude to mystery THAT ISN'T IN THE PIECE ITSELF. I'm going to pick on you for a while because you do the same kind of bullshit I did and called it poetry when I was a teenager until somebody kicked me in the teeth long enough that I started thinking about what I was writing (not that that helps me much, lol, but whatever)