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<{Baba^Yaga}> replying on The deafening silence in the world or something by Bachus 17 Mar 2003, 10:54 AM

Can i ask you what the ebola virus and depeche mode has to do with political statements? Not a fucking thing. lol. Nor was that the intention. You are lost in america. This poem is about dying with style, now why don't you hurry along and find some style of your own at the public library down the block.

<{Baba^Yaga}> replying on Thracian mountains until the Sea by Shardik 17 Mar 2003, 10:46 AM

Thanks, Orpheus, is from there, and almost every famous greek based music myth, and gods, and the ultimate muses originated from there. I'm just doing my duty for the world and my ancestors with this ode. Growing up a bit, if you will, just for a spell. You and the dark one usually rate poems at the same time every day. Is that because it's around the time England wakes up for muffins and tea? do you drink tea or coffee in the morning or vice versa? by the way , "time machine" with Guy Pierce... Fucking heaves! Thought you should know in case you attempt to rent, and if it's to late, i'm sorry.

<{Baba^Yaga}> replying on Heirlooms by Bachus 17 Mar 2003, 10:29 AM

Some stains come clean, some don't. I do. You don't. I'm going to England in May, wanna come? I'll push you and clean you and tuck you in, as Jesus would..

elizabethann replying on lost by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 10:20 AM

Well the way I look at it is, everyone else that has read the poem understood it quite well. Now if Jay is unable to read it and get it, that's really a personal problem.

lastobelus replying on lost by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 10:17 AM

A long time ago, I used to think that my poetry was good because it was hard to understand. After many years I realized my poetry was hard to understand because I was an untalented hack who's unable to say things clearly and precisely. So I got a job.

elizabethann replying on lost by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 10:05 AM

lol. well it wouldn't stop crying ... i had to. (note: i never actually hurt an infant .. that actually refers to the september 11 mixture of the poem)

lastobelus replying on lost by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 10:02 AM

JESUS CHRIST, HOW COULD YOU DO SUCH THINGS TO A POOR INNOCENT LITTLE INFANT!!!!!!!!!!!!

elizabethann replying on lost by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 9:48 AM

well my dear sweet jay ... that makes me happy. if my poetry is too hard to understand then i'm doing something right. but for your sake, allow me to explain. this poem is a mixture of things. one - september 11. two - my own personal experience with fights. if it still makes no sense, well then it never will.

Blindproject217 replying on Another Dull Moment by Blindproject217 17 Mar 2003, 9:45 AM

Thanx this is my first real attempt at this so it kinda sux.

some deleted user on Lover's Portrait by Dancer 17 Mar 2003, 9:45 AM

u can make this better

Blindproject217 replying on Another Dull Moment by Blindproject217 17 Mar 2003, 9:44 AM

Im not sure what happened with those ? marks either, I put a ' but they changed or somthin

some deleted user on lost by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 9:43 AM

i'm not sure what ur sayin here

Blindproject217 replying on Another Dull Moment by Blindproject217 17 Mar 2003, 9:43 AM

hahaha exactly.

some deleted user on kiss by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 9:42 AM

i think u should do more then kiss

some deleted user on sexy by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 9:40 AM

hmm...ok, but could use more feeling

some deleted user on i won't by elizabethann 17 Mar 2003, 9:37 AM

ok

lastobelus replying on Another Dull Moment by Blindproject217 17 Mar 2003, 7:21 AM

after which, you can simply change the title to "man choking on own figurative vomit saved by beautiful woman"

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. on Meditation 03 by Blue Magpie 17 Mar 2003, 7:00 AM

God's test is the GCSE Religious Studies examination. I got a C even though I didn't revise! Clever or what!?!?!

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. on Heirlooms by Bachus 17 Mar 2003, 6:57 AM

I think what you've done here is confused "poetry" with "a series of uneventful anecdotes about childhood". A good try though! 10!!!

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. on Another Dull Moment by Blindproject217 17 Mar 2003, 6:54 AM

I would suggest the following changes: "Another Dull Moment" --> " " "Another boring moment" --> " " "I search these desolate streets for signs of life" --> " " "I am overcome with calamity and strife" --> " " "Plagued by this earthly mindset" --> " " "The world is plotting against me" --> " " "Day and night it plans my demise" --> " " "My eyes are dimming" --> " " "The light in this place has long since faded" --> " " "I choke on the dark" --> " " "As slowly I am suffocated" --> " " "I turn my eyes" --> " " "As I take my last breath" --> " " "I see your face" --> " " "And I am in wonder at your beauty" --> " " "So perfect so picturesque" --> " " "You take your hand in mine" --> " " "No longer do I look for a sign" --> " " "No longer do I search for a reason" --> " " "The vail is lifted" --> " " "I stand up and slowly look around" --> " " "The light comes" --> " " "And I slowly understand" --> " " "Why I?ve wasted all this time" --> " " "Why I?ve wasted all these years" --> " " "Why I?ve thrown away these moments" --> " " "Why I?ve used up all tears" --> " " " Time has come" --> " " "And time has gone" --> " " "But you stand here" --> " " "My longing heart has found no answers to speak of" --> " " "No longer must I search for reason" --> " " "I have found it in you" --> " "