god'swife
on Skin Milk by Fear of Garbage
20 Feb 2003, 8:04 AM
Fascinating. Awkward. "You are not you" doesn't make sense here and detracts from what you're saying. it would seem he is what he is, and you have discribed it. I like the sort of dumb way this is written. Even the illiterate have insights. Can you find something more interesting for 'well-muscled'?
This is so thoughtful in both respects. Thank you I will cherish it dearly. I loved this :
And I am alone
And I am without
I am within
My own fertile doubts
Fighting these feelings
Fighting my pride
Fighting the faith
That I let slide
-----you turned my blood warm all over.......xxxx cad
Change the tense of the last line. Somehow "appears" works for this. Some new pressent beginning.Death of day, and then a moon right now.
Sorry I missed this. Very fine. Some tiny edits, I'll let you know. But otherwise an insightful tale.
skaskowski
replying on it sounds like dying but tastes like living. by skaskowski
20 Feb 2003, 12:43 AM
thanks...
Lord Ganus just made profiteroles. Nice use of language.
dammit! he's NOT keats--he's PROUST!!!! trying to throw us rankers off the scent with a little misspelling, eh, monsieur?
well, it won't work!
Interesting that you decided to write about a remembrance of things past. Most people just ignore temporal limitations and dive straight into remembrances of future things. I'm jolly glad you made that clear in the title though, because otherwise I might have been rather confused. I can still remember the last time was rather confused. It was a week next Tuesday, and I had tried to blow my nose with a boiled egg.
P.S I'm afraid you have forgotten to remember the spelling of remembrance.
LMAO.
Smiley I Love You. These perversions always brighten my day. They're funny as usual.
Fantastic. just fantastic.
i'm all smiley and proud. I'm doing my "shy modest grin" I picked up from some Japanese girls I knew.
The other two were difficult to explain without desending into mere vulgarity. I like the effect of leaving things a little suggestive.
Wacka wacka wacka
SWAGGER AWARDE. 10!
will you ride the drop with me atop the stratoshere?
The great one... When did you get back, online? i thought you were counting sheep in a shack in tasmania?
That's what i said;) <{.-:-.}> here's the ufo i promised you. xo h.
meds fucking kill
ooh. i missed a stanza anyway.
It's missing your boss and a pawn shop.