bunniesnangels
replying on Options (Senryu) by bunniesnangels
19 Feb 2003, 4:43 AM
hmm, i sense a couple of disturbing themes.
ah, way to raise the literary bar!
children mimic their parents to an extent, but au contraire, i spend all my time cleaning up their messes. i can't tolerate very much clutter.
travel the world with me Z, with a stopover in the elvis drive through Vegas, I'll pay for the Howard Johnson's and motel6 and you pay for the fuel, I know how to treat rock chix, this is ice ..8
How dare you use that language on poemranker. 7.
shit. i'll say. wow. that's a departure for you. a relase. or two. or 3. yessir. yes indeedy. needy.
i just wished you had eased me into it more with some foreplay, instead of thrusting deftly from the outset.
I didn't like the rhythm in the last line of s1-5,7.
but the rest I loved. 9.
just posted a poem that was (sort of) an attempt to diverge from "my style" (and sort of just a needed, erm, release).
chinese cold tea?
blue laws in california?
wtf
nice try, but you fail.
miserably may i add.
watch
Look at me a fucking hack
a steaming mound of poo
i can't see or turn back
because i'm sniffing glue
and i know i'm absurd
for dicking with the pope
it's just the way i praise the word
when i can barely cope
with the shit i read all day
how can one survive
i need a whip to properly flay
i hate being alive
Can you fucking blame me?
You were serving cold tea.
children mimic their parents, perhaps your a pig?
great haiku though.
Sink masturbating.
Walk versus gay sex
a bowl of pears on table
factory worker
Teah, but does your son nod off at three years old on the couch while playing video games sick on robitussin... sitting up playing salt water fishing? some thing just make me giggle.
Will do.
Check line 12, and do you mean fractal or fractual. lol. i'll wait.
it's Quailing named after that thingy that hangs in their face... lol. the last was the best.
some deleted user
on Say the Word 'Trousers' Without Laughing by Nicholas Jones
18 Feb 2003, 6:41 PM
hah ah.... very interesting..
You have exceptional timing, but your poetry? creditcard's 3.00$? to view your web page and poetry? what are you some kind of fucking uppity elitist jew? you should fucking pay people three dollars to read this shit. three dollars a fucking second, idiot.
Listen, could you write a poem about how you and me are two entirely different people that write nothing like one another? thanks. It's just that i'm getting phone calls were people are claiming you're me, and we're not. I'm sure you can respect the seriousness of the situation. thanks.
I really enjoy ur poem!