god'swife
on The Blooding by Mr Pig
11 Feb 2003, 2:47 PM
Packs a mean punch. Loved the ending, with its coming of age blood. A blurring of the line. I have to re-read the rest.
Unique Yew Nork. Dammit!
hmm... well we all have to start somewhere.
Say 'Unique New York', BZB.
They showcase, but hardly what you think. Plaid is for overpaid
interior designers with weak bladders and divinity complexes. by the way.
Move over Jimi!
manic depression, babycakes. bipolar. woo-hoo.
Love the first stanza. And the compost/ garden imagery works with that but the soldier/pill/seesaw thing doesn't jibe to me. I think I could dance to it though.
Hope? Fear? Justice?
Systematic? Dogmatic? Pragmatic?
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Great use of "Nicaragua" to rhyme with "peanuts"
Hi bunny. I know we haven't always seen eye to eye, but I'm confident that if you provide a full and frank apology, we can forget about this rather unpleasant business. Friends?
The lines,
"That light is hope
Without it she'd die"
are beautiful, by the way.
There's a lot of cliche in the language ("caged bird")bit, but if you polished it a little, it could be good.
It seemed time. Glad the otaku thing went over well. I've been into anime a lot lately, so you can see the inspiration.
thankee.
I know it does. That's one of the reasons it's so popular among men. though a cockring or viagra are also viable options.
otaku hahahaa
Also, limericks whose first line ends in the same word as the last are ace. go go gadget lear
Oh i liked this one. Dead dog walking !!!!!
who you callin a buffoon !
then change it, one would be a buffoon not to.
A very somber piece. I think it fine except for maybe a couple spots. I don't think you want to use the word boulder in the fourth stanza and also the rhyme between edge and cage just doesn't work. But a pretty decent work nonetheless.
Its a British term for being paid a pitifull amount. Could have
(should have?) used "peanuts" instead. Its not so much a poem really, I just watched the news last night and the three stories followed on from each other seamlessly - The sheer madness of it all struck me. Glad it make you think though, thanks.
does famring coffee beans for coffee beans make sense though? thats what is bugging me on an otherwise fine piece?