Dostoyevsky
on Senses by lunar
2 Feb 2003, 3:10 PM
but you write of love, and you love Tien so does that make you a hipporite? life isnt a game its a very cruel joke
talk more of love i like that better. although an 8 for this
and don't forget writer of triangle poems!!!
Blade is just a mindless brit popper. He is trying to be stupid so remove him. But add Range and put Cadacus back on there!!!!! And DA for his abundance of ass pimples!!! And God's Wife for that Raven poem!!
This is just sweet little Tintigales way of being on the edge and controversial. Really, he is a sweet boy. Forgive him.
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=1415
Can I be on the list, too?
pbd. yes, i am INBRED, and if you stick around for a while, and maybe read theannals of the ranker, you will see that it's all good. it's a funcking fantastical spiderweb, and you are a little pink fly flirting with she doesn't know what. hope you greased up your feet!
This is good but could be better by
tightening and deleting words that
add no value to the poem. And the
rhyme sounds a bit forced in spots.
Still, a nice lyric.
Some people are just so heartless....
Could be better. Have you read I'm a snob by zero? i think it was zero but the point is you used almost everything he mentions about pimple poems(guilty of that myself). Try reading that then coming back and revising this one. -6-
That gellar part is just outta left field some where and its not like the rest of the poem is tied together very well either so enjoy your zero.
* Opening
A big zero for taste. In fact I'd give it two if i could.
Full marks for speed and topicality. Two out of ten for versification. Zero for taste.
You do know that you suck at this right?
Nice response. I left myself wide open for that one.
Zzinnia66 are you inbreed??? Cause this poems great and well you do leave alot of comments that have absolutly nothing to do with either the poem you post to or even the topic of the comments posted.
haha cute
I actually liked the story told from the speaker/rapist's view, but as I've noticed you do in other poems, you sacrificed rhythm for rhyme and that puts unnatural stops in the poem.