Caducus
on Life by marvelis
1 Feb 2003, 4:45 AM
There is no such word as gloriest, how about ..and the humblest.
Not a great alternative but an apt decription, I'll think about it but i am trying to read as much today as possible on p/r -6-
pretty much agree with JC some nice imgery here, think the 1st 3 lines of the last stanza needs a re-edit, it kind of goes a bit off there but a good read
My mate has a boa constrictor and keeps frozen rodents for his treats, this was one shaken martini --------------> 7
you are mad...but funny too -7
Thank you....and thanks also for the spelling correction.
Its was just a suggestion, Here have another. Well maybe you could use gomez run! more in the start and gomez run away! towards the middle and gomez run away now! towards the end. Then your still intensify the using your "chorus" and they stay.
pretty good but the line has the joy of a 1000 little boys and girls sent a shiver down my spine -7-
Oh. I see. My friend had the same problem when his toucan died.
Jeremi B. Handrinos
replying on Hermes Trigamestus (was not a monk edit) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
31 Jan 2003, 9:40 PM
No, Horus8 is my real name, and Jeremi is just something i hold onto to pass the time? Darkest recesses of poemranker? that's funny... Do you mean Babbit's unexplored posterior cavity, or Settle's odiferous inner ear infection. By the way Nick, the only thing bathos about these haiku is that they're not. Come now, let's not insult one another's intelligence. I thought we were beyond our Sophmore years, and experimenting with real lab beakers and bunson burners now? I'd prefer if you'd not bore me with your epic similes and rhetorical figures in the name of tradition Nick. I am starting to get the impression that your consistant Jacobean age yammering was not a phase, but a pacifier. What? Am i not aloud a little light verse once in a while? You pian my sole Nick, you really do. CARPE DIEM DOGS!
Short, and Sweet. I must admit I love it! an 8 for you! But I think I would like to see it made a little longer, just a thought, =)
lol, dame those cats :)
LOL, great stuff >10 :)
never much to say about a haiku, but this is interesting
some deleted user
on haiku's i love but i cannot do them well enough by UAFANTHORPEY
31 Jan 2003, 8:10 PM
just for this waste of space and honesty i'll giv it a 6
LOL, sick but good
They need to be there. They're crucial! It's kind of like a song and they're the chorus. It's an echoing cry throughout the poem. It's needed.
Outstanding! Truly and utterly fantastic!
Wow....that was amazing. Great detail. You must've poured your heart right out!