some deleted user
on Dancers of the Night by Teen14
31 Jan 2003, 7:24 PM
its nice, i like the rhyme and the imagery. I think i understand what your saying >10 :)
nice work
your right about me. mostly everything i right sucks, has a simplistic rhyme scheme and classic cliches (thats what i think), but its fun.
Your close to caputing it but maybe a few less gomez runs at the beginning so that you build a sort of increasing frenzy.
Next time try
Drinking Vodka
open cupboard, grab bottle
sit back and enjoy
I noticed that in the song its
"Frankenstien is teaching kindergarden in the vally
Count Dracula sould his fangs to the Japanese
The Wolf man went Ivy League..." and so on and so forth.
Sounds very trippy much better in the song. Thanks.
Other. Yes. Most perspicaciously said, mon frere. Indeed, our end-of-the-month extravaganzas have become legendary, have they not? Did you hear that Tijuana called, and they want us there gor February? I thought not. I told them, no, we were booked in Sao Paulo, and absolutely could not cancel. And then, they brought up the mirkat incident. Shit. What was I supposed to say? So, plans have changed. Times have changed. The answer, my friend, is blowing...well, this is a family network, so I guess I'll keep that one to myself.
If Woody had gone straight to the police, this would never have happened.
I have read them all. his angst, while not 'teen' _per se,_ is of the same calibre. By proxy, the Shoe fits.
and i, great bear, am a succubus. follow me to my den. you won't be sorry.
I love limmericks hehe.
FDL!!! I love it!
Fuck. I'm stumped...ahh does the hamster represent 'a furry eclectic olive' or the hibernating tread wheel activitie's of our soles. I'm fully aware that the ice tray represents our unity through division, but WHY! WHY SWEET JESUS cAN'T WE INVENT A FREEZER with a hamster escape hatch... i mean for the love of rodent's and plague and funny looking men with tits can't we find it in our soles to just listen to what our hamster friends are trying to say to us... "don't let friends ice skate without gloves and a hat"...it's really that simple.
Now this is an 'other' . Thank god when we put on our end of the month donkey shows at your garage they are anything but common profanity. Hear that 'club stridex'? We are uncommonly profane. New and improved astringent for your blackheads, and as soon as the swelling goes down on my knees i'm going to prove it... has anyone seen my mineral oil?
My father was an Incubus.
That's really interesting and it makes a lot of sense, but it sounds more like a message than a poem.
Wow...ummm...ok....that's really scary....wow.....wow