razorgrin
on The darkest woods ever by Shardik
31 Jan 2003, 11:55 AM
Very nice. I go for walks through shoulder-high snowbanks. It's dark and echoey.
Shardik, I have a coment for you. BREAK FREE! Your material is interesting, if a little metaphysical, but you base your writing too much on rules, amd so your expression gets lost. Blame your english teachers, they impressed your mind way too much.
Aww..and you even think we care about your sad sad pain of runny eyeliner...here's a zero-flavoured lollipop.
i like it, and you say i confuse you :) 10
The redeeming part was the "know my pian" bit. Funniest twist ever. All this time I was reading what looked like a Serious and Heartfelt Poeme, but pian was a great satirical twist. Of course if it really is just a typo, that makes you an illiterate fucktard.
Enter, readers at your own riske, for here there be angst. And shab-ass angst at that.
I like seeing the very deformed. They amuse me.
"You don't scare me. That could be anyone's ass" -Mayor quimby, the simpsons
while this laid it all out nicely, i would have liked to see some parody of the pimple poem in the construct of this one. i want it meaner, i want it to point fingers at the guilty, naming names, naming poems...(but leave poor Katie out of it).
I'm afraid it doesn't mean that, Caducus. I thought I told you to think very carefully! Perhaps if I give you a clue you will see the error of your ways?
Consider this: Another word for "incapability" is "inability"
So, your sentence can be rewritten as:
"Forgive me for the inability of being unable to stop."
Now think very carefully about what it means to have the inability of being unable to do something.
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don't be shy. submit.
when God is done with your dishes, could you give him a ride to my house? i've had to wear the same pants for 3 days in a row. and i hate to do laundry. he can hit the liquor cabinet and watch the soaps while he waits. it's 3 or 4 loads. a coupla hours, max.
thanks.
only if you'll buy me one of those 'silk' roses, with a 'teardrop' on them the next time you stop for diesel. sweetheart.
now, did you want the maid, or the nurse?
zounds like zitty verse to me!
Lose the damn explaining paragraph. No one gives a damn, sweetheart.
Do you know, I think this may be one of the funniest poemes to be found here. Keep it up!