You reached really deep into the crap bin for this one, huh?

A nice concept but I think the overall effort need more thought.

Best biking movie ever made, although if you notice when he it topping 50 plus MPH behind the semi he is in his small chain ring. But, hey, it is a movie. It is sad you titled such a bad poem for such a great sports movie. Shame on you.

Underwater math is a beautifuL and novel idea.

i didnt like it only cause im not all poetic. im sure its awesome but i give it a 5

First of all the title; Potluck, Thursday Nights That is a wonderful title, leaving things open and full of surprise. Last line first: out into the starlight The big stone barn shines warmth Tthrough the overhead glass doors. Never twice the same these steps we take. The gravel path through the cedars is ice tonight. I am the last to arrive. The dozer and the back-hoe loom Hazy orange Sleeping behind a sheet of insulating plastic They crouch there, in the makeshift hall Behind the roll down door Prehistoric shadows Like a playground for kids who don't listen. The table is set, and the food is almost ready. There are four meats, and no salad but nobody minds. Another log is thrown on the fire to keep us warm And I have brought winter ale. We dance after dinner, separating circles that overlap and reform, distortions in the same flow, dance ourselves a river each week. Never twice the same, these steps we trace. Dance, slide, swing and kick Socks off, crazy laughing. We make The rafters quake. .....That's it for now. You exhuast me. I really love this by the way. My clever girl, you are like a phone call to the twilight zone.

damn. you are so on when you do this kind of thing. excellent modernization. fantastic twist. and then we were undone. you make me jealous, girl.

I like........but im more of a romantic type of poem person

I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Awesome really really awesome i like

not bad not bad at all actually i like

Great use of the "statement". Fantastic use of telling rather than showing. Great use of "Party" three times in less than 40 lines, dude.

How exacty is this a haiku?

Great rap and rhyme!!!!!

Well, at least you still have the day job. Or is it done at night?