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replying on Minoan lover by Jeremi B. Handrinos
22 Jan 2003, 7:31 AM
indeed.
My name is Maximus Desimus Meridius
Commander of the armies of the north
General of the felix legions
Loyal servant to the true emporer
Marcus Aurelius.
Father to a murdered son,
husband to a murdered wife,
and I will have my vengeance,
in this life or the next.
a hairy Brazillian? Where the hell do Brazillian waxes come from then? A painful experience indeed. Hahaaaaaaa....you always make me laugh....8
small stainlees scoop of happiness.
Fantastic. All the spoons in my house are dirty and in the kitchen sink, but they dance for you, good sir.
Well, that's unfortunate. perhaps you should always carry a Lady Gilette and some shaving cream in case of such emergencies.
Neat. When I left, he looked like he was either going for the full dress uniform or the cap. Another friend of mine got a 10-year service KGB pocket watch when he was in Moscow.
You're a laxative
to my constipation
I'm bloated
while you're gone
with relentless filth
and unbroken wind
fermenting
within my bowels
Did you nearly soil yourself but then catch it in time?
ahhhhhhh....sweet childhood memories...simple and to the point....8
Give it up.
Awwwwww. Sweet. Have you run out and fallen in love. Paxil is the secret to success
NYC girls are the best...here's a 9
Good work, my favorite of what I have read of yours. I like where you put "the phone rings" line, it does a good job of both dividing and connecting your thoughts.
oops ... I meant to say "that last 'line'", not "night" ... you get my drift
This poem was only a 7 or 8 for me until that last night. You really changed the tone with that line. You see your own indulgent angst, and you connect with the reader on that note. I agree, you know exactly wo you are.
Love this. However, I think the "yearning souls" take you away from your point. Unless I am all wrong, and that is exactly the point you're trying to make, sneaky you :)
Haunting. Reminds me a little of a little of a Third Eye Blind lyric: I couldn't define what you're getting at, but I definitely feel you.
No frills, striaght-forward, "rough," if you will. I couldn't pull it off, however you did it amazingly.
Nice play on words/images with the sqaure and triangle