This has intensity but you should really not use "u" instead of "you." It's grating and annoying. Nice description of depression, though.

you could always gouge out your eyes with an electric mixer. problem solved!

0. sort of depressing, really.

well, it does explain a lot.

sometimes the work just speaks for itself. 0.

ah-ha-ha! he said shit! the subversive young wit! Give 'im a 1, i says.

dona matter what eet ees. eees goot.

I cant find the changes.Still like it.

My God! This poeme is so beautiful! 10/10!!!!!!!11

I have written a lot about death, and this my friend made the banshee of my soul shriek decibels hitting a few nerves along the way, you dont have to copyright work on here by the way -9-

I like this a lot, but I think you may have misclassified it as a limerick.

Intelligently written, I must say the last stanza is the icing on a cake of frustration

I was hoping for filth and got this purity ------huh ? its good though as ranger says it says a lot with so little -7-

Send this to the Japs it might put them off their sharkfin soup, Thanks for enlightening me in the nature of Sharks. (Thought this was about salesman) 7

Dramatic, and the ending....cool ! *8*

interestiong!8

Yes, well done.