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god'swife replying on of people and places (final cut)I by INTRANSIT 17 Dec 2002, 2:25 PM
I liked the question better than what you changed it to.
INTRANSIT replying on of people and places (final cut)I by INTRANSIT 17 Dec 2002, 2:24 PM
ok, mr knowit. Changed. And I'm listening. 6min left on stupid timer.
god'swife on of people and places (final cut)I by INTRANSIT 17 Dec 2002, 2:24 PM
Theecond stanza's beautiful. I almost wish you could leave out the last stanza, but something needs to be said. could you come up with a metaphor? What were you looking at/thinking of when you wrote this?
poetandknowit replying on fire by bxjay170 17 Dec 2002, 2:22 PM
Pigs can also do that.
god'swife replying on fire by bxjay170 17 Dec 2002, 2:20 PM
In fact it may be argued that we are the only animals who question the morality/immorality of killing.
poetandknowit on of people and places (final cut)I by INTRANSIT 17 Dec 2002, 2:18 PM
Why the question. Figure it out yourself.
god'swife on fire by bxjay170 17 Dec 2002, 2:17 PM
shouldn't it be 'slip out their hands...' by the way we are not the only animals who kil for pleasure. Eatings a pleasure, and fuckings a pleasure, and so is being #1.
nentwined on eyes by moonUnit 17 Dec 2002, 2:14 PM
this I like. it captured a "thing" and played it back from a different perspective. especially the "perhaps they just imagined you" twist. :)
nentwined on Various actions by New Life Drug 17 Dec 2002, 2:11 PM
no thank you.
nentwined on Elegy by moonUnit 17 Dec 2002, 2:10 PM
hannah sounds familiar. the rest don't ring a bell. ? color me clueless, I'll refrain from voting.
nentwined on fire by bxjay170 17 Dec 2002, 1:36 PM
interesting. any reason you used /'s as linebreaks? damned glad I put in the "wordwrap ~ 72 chars" code a few days ago. this seems like a reasonable rap, but I don't see anything here that makes it stand out from the crowd.
==Doylum replying on Surreal... by Yardbird 17 Dec 2002, 1:25 PM
don't worry even people who actually take an interest in futbar glaze over when fulham play
nentwined on Misplaced admoration by deep-as-a-puddle 17 Dec 2002, 12:58 PM
too much "forced the line to fit the rhyme". rhythm could use work.
nentwined on Caged World by deep-as-a-puddle 17 Dec 2002, 12:57 PM
mame? or maim? very different things. one's an arcade game emulator. reads like a bunch of cliches strung together. :/
nentwined on Trust by hobojo 17 Dec 2002, 12:56 PM
drown(ed?) hmm. nah.
nentwined on Of Deformed Frogs and Prosperity by Quarton 17 Dec 2002, 12:02 PM
hmm. good social commentary, ish -- except it was too *thick* to read through, back and forth, on and on. and I'd be one to agree with you (at least what I read through).
nentwined on I Can Write A Wrong, But I Can't Right A Poem by horus8 17 Dec 2002, 11:49 AM
definitely an other. I have to admit I didn't make it to the bottom, but I enjoyed what I skimmed.
nentwined replying on Surreal... by Yardbird 17 Dec 2002, 11:48 AM
well, I for one just glazed over the Fulham FC bit. "whatever" :)
nentwined on Surreal... by Yardbird 17 Dec 2002, 11:47 AM
good surreal, but no rhyming?
poetandknowit replying on Popaul by Nicholas Jones 17 Dec 2002, 11:43 AM
Actually, I think when you focus your images on what you know the poems are quite good. And even some of the political poems work - "The Left Book Club" etc. It is when you write overwhelmingly generic poems either designed to be reactionary or not that I think you wander off the path. But the poem where you are learning your father's language. That was good stuff as is the West Sands poem. You live in beautiful country and evoke it well, so those are the poems I find most compelling. And you like good films. So that is a plus. What or whom is the dissertation on?