horus8
on Alone by ThoughtfulSoul
27 Nov 2002, 9:37 PM
lol! i concur.b
Change your name to IFUCKINGSUCK. This reads like a pathetic proxy for a 2pac rap, mixed with some piss and shit you found lying in your stack of unpublished poems. If you pride yourself on this consider going through puberty, growing a pair, then writing about something that isn't bromidic. Oh, and get rid of the shit you use for fountain pens and the stale piss you use for ink. Thanks bitch,
Love ErgoErgun
This poem belongs in a nursery with other wreckless idiots who have no balls and spew shit from their mouths and asses whenever they see fit. This poem sucks. If you like it, you suck. Christof: grow some fucking balls before you to decide to piss in Microsoft Word, thanks.
the only fucking magical combo here is how you were able to convince two of your under the sheets dutch oven buddies into voting a 10 and an eight on this. now that zubs is a magical combo, but not deviled eggs and cold duck. DUCK! 0.
it's your penguin spirit guide...pointing you to the promise land..
honestly...you have a knack for this sort of thing.7.
like a bullit. concubines are groovy. here's a 9. the title works well off of te statement, as it should.
alot? Salem's lot. h
no, STOP!...here's your blow dryer back...don't do it. try a nive relaxing bath while you dry your hair.n
really good
Thats cool
I love it!!!
Nice
Definitely 2 shags here!
Copy that I did!
thankyou very much, my highschool sweetheart's uncle went for this big sleep recently...i thought i would write it for her and his memory..it was all i could do.a
"hells, not me," was the pinnacle of this cap, is it, yes i believe that was a cap on someone..hmmmmmmm. your not a dumbass. you're a compass, and jeff bridges from starman all at the same time.o
This does not comply with the dictates of logical poetics.
But seriously, theres something about the word "mistress" that I just don't like. But I was going along with it until the final line.
Maybe if it was made into a Haiku?
How unseemly.
Theres some genuine emotion there, but I don't care for the imagery.
Welcome to Life.
i feel sad now.