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Blue Magpie replying on Johannesburg 2002 by Blue Magpie 26 Nov 2002, 8:28 PM

Hi Hobojo, Thanks for the reply and for the suggestion.

<~> on Wallet Burn by New Life Drug 26 Nov 2002, 8:27 PM

erasing them won't do any good if i have the numbers.then you'll feel the burn. did i ever tell you guys about the nice irish boy who got naked and forgot his wallet in my back seat? so i sent his wife porn on his amex, with love from me? no? too bad. it was a funny story. buy me a beer sometime, and i'll even tell you about the crackwhore i saved him from.

<~> on ode to horus by daniella 26 Nov 2002, 8:24 PM

not my slice, i hope. you did save one for me, didn't you dearie? with pepperoni?

Blue Magpie replying on Johannesburg 2002 by Blue Magpie 26 Nov 2002, 8:24 PM

Hi Caducus, Yeah, the combination of spin doctors, Tony Bleah sent 40, and the WTO made the summit a bit of a wimp out.

<~> on ode to bacchus by daniella 26 Nov 2002, 8:24 PM

so, where have i heard that before? 'soulles goat', that is. i must have been bending too close to his brown eye. again. dammit. i love an asshole that can rhyme.

Blue Magpie replying on Johannesburg 2002 by Blue Magpie 26 Nov 2002, 8:21 PM

Hi Ranger, Thanks for the reply and the crit, seeing how long I worked on this it's amazing what still slips through.

<~> on With Sleepless Breath... by LovingWhispers 26 Nov 2002, 8:21 PM

a very comforting chant, but, this line feels awkward in sound: "When I think about us making love "

<~> replying on Check Yourself by INTRANSIT 26 Nov 2002, 8:15 PM

welcome back,

INTRANSIT replying on Check Yourself by INTRANSIT 26 Nov 2002, 8:13 PM

damn. I'll work it tomorrow. Thanks z.

INTRANSIT replying on Charlie by INTRANSIT 26 Nov 2002, 8:11 PM

I'll re-post one of my other haikus tomorrow which is better. I just did this 'cause I really love this goldfish my wife bought me weeks ago.

<~> replying on Check Yourself by INTRANSIT 26 Nov 2002, 8:06 PM

works okay. but why the judge in the first stanza? how'd your shoulder get busted?

<~> replying on Charlie by INTRANSIT 26 Nov 2002, 8:05 PM

swing the meaning a bit. my favorite haikus have a twist implied within. e.g.--the first 2 lines make me think of a disco ball, but your title isn't duplictous enough to make the last line a relevation. see it?

<~> replying on Charlie by INTRANSIT 26 Nov 2002, 8:03 PM

ben left to go do something manly, i think. so it was just me and nat and the kids and crazy paul. ho hum. that's why i'm home early. oh, and the slammer showed up and had a bite with us too.

<~> replying on Some place west of here, or the big blah blah. both apply by horus8 26 Nov 2002, 8:01 PM

have you not been reading my poems? sanity is furtive, p&k. besides, you're not west coast, even if you did camp out there. poser. great divide, my eye. you have no coast of your own! ha! why would anyone do that to themself?

<~> on Boxers Over Y-Fronts by un4208 26 Nov 2002, 7:49 PM

so you wear your boxers over your y-fronts, that way, when a chick laughs at you for being small, you can blame it on your undergarments? GENIUS!!!

<~> on Surface Damage by un4208 26 Nov 2002, 7:45 PM

very, very special. and your bus, among other things, is half the normal size, non?

<~> replying on Friend by MysticalRaven88 26 Nov 2002, 7:40 PM

jesus. you guys get hard when the wind blows, don't you

poetandknowit replying on Some place west of here, or the big blah blah. both apply by horus8 26 Nov 2002, 7:39 PM

Well, since the Brits are panning the Yanks and the Welsh the Brits and Dolie is panning for gold and urananium in the midland of his own mind, shall we start our own civil war. Like the East coast sucks...how could anyone with sane mind live there?

poetandknowit replying on Charlie by INTRANSIT 26 Nov 2002, 7:36 PM

Was everybody nice to everyone else? No food fights? I must walk the dogs.

<~> on Some place west of here, or the big blah blah. both apply by horus8 26 Nov 2002, 7:35 PM

oh my. left coast strikes back. and makes me smile.