anitawit
replying on The Advent Of Monsoon by anitawit
22 Nov 2002, 9:46 AM
Similar in flavour perhaps? They were both written in the same year during a stay in the mountains (though the subjects are different).
Well now, I shall put it here. Considering Mr. Elliot, a Misery boy if there ever was one, wrote a plethora of obscure material, none of which , racist and all, made it to the London and New York stage, why would you choose one of the most well known ditties in his arsenal? And why compare yourself to the now deceased God's Wife who, due to yet another monthly bloodletting, has packed her poems and pulled an Amelia on us all. So you tell me who is the Gwen and who is the poet, besides neither in this case.
Pretty
Couldn't have been one dormouse...
Thanks for the comments Caducus. I'm not always good at explaining these, sometimes I don't know, but I'll try. I wrote this on a hot humid day, probably in a state of mid summer lethargy. To me it just expresses a kind of smoldering irritation at humans in general, and some of the circumstances in my own life, recent separation, approaching mid-life and so on. This just kind of bled out and stands mostly in it's original state. Thanks again for the comments, I hope that helps.
I think its the end !
For your keyboard that is, for Xmas I will buy you an enter button
and a spring
This is really good but its very similar to 'Come Nightime' I think you should remove one and enter one of them later, different beasts with the same growl.
You seem to have been inspired and it shows, I was wondering if the little pinpoints of light were the eyes of a dormouse about to be slaughtered in the matrix?
So where's the load of bollocks?
at least it wasn't a sock
Again, I've been taken back to a place I've been before - and also 6 years long.
So original. So inspired. These lyrics touch me in a way no man ever has. LET ME GUESS: THIS SONG IS TO BE SUNG IN A BARELY-AUDIBLE, SENSITIVE VOICE, WHILE A SINGLE ACOUSTIC GUITAR STRUMS IN THE BACKGROUND. THEN WHEN THE EMOTION IN THE LYRICS BREAKS LOOSE SO DOES THE GUITAR AND DRUMS AND EVERYONE 'ROCKS OUT'.
she got me. no wonder it sounded so familiar. geez.
Regarding "ehterised"--if she's going to rip off someone else's shit--especially someone as well known as T.S. Eliot, and especially one of his most famous poems, for chrissakes--you'd think she'd be able to at least spell everything correctly. I'm surprised she took the time to retype it--she could have just cut and pasted it from Bartleby.com.
A powerful statement indeed, its well written and you need to name more specifically those responsible for this atrocity,(e.g the government, the husbands, local authorities, the u.n.) because the subject is sensitive and to some an outsider viewing the insider may provoke racial accusations.
I think however you've researched the facts, the last line could be more affecting, maybe 'Vishnu's Infasdel' would go better for the last line.
Bottom line I liked it, (7)
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on Ten solid facts about -=Dark Angel=-, by his biggest palm frond, me. by horus8
22 Nov 2002, 8:03 AM
Also, we fuck behind the bicycle shed after school sometimes.
YEAH LOL I LIKED 'GROUNDHOG DAY' BUT IT WAS A BIT REPETITIVE HYUK HYUK
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on Gilded Stumps of Olde (AN STORY THAT IS NOT AN POEME) by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
22 Nov 2002, 8:00 AM
TYPOS? THERE AREN'T ANY TYPOGRAPHICAL ERRORS, IF THAT'S WHAT YOU MEAN. LOL SHOE-BE-DO-BE-DO
WTF? Are you guys kidding--two "8" votes? Fuck--doesn't anyone read Eliot--or are you being sardonic?
ATHENA--last time you ripped off this T.S. Eliot poem (Guitar and Drum solo), adding some lame final lines of your own, I thought maybe you were making some kind of statement (no clue what it might be, mind you, but gave you the benefit of the doubt). What are you doing here, exactly, besides plagiarizing Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock? Write your own shit, why don't you?