horus8
on wax by New Life Drug
26 Oct 2002, 8:30 AM
lose the last line, cuz nobody really gives a fuck. unfortunately...plus it draws more interest thatta way otay. otay. 6.
i would end it with, "the strangers part ways" but make it "the strangers ways part". very good though. i love pismo beach and went there once with my first girlfriend laura padilla and her stepfather and mother from bakersfield in a light blue dodge omni...we watched a greatwhite shark eating seals one afternon, while the sunset. we set. ironically we parted ways. sorry about te homeless bastard...he's probably better off..cable is expensive..these days.10.
bravo, but can you play twister nude with an eloctronic waffle iron. 9. carry on. i enjoyed your word misplacement quite a bit and the title hook in also.
little_angel_maria, I'm not sure what fantastic delusions you're currently entertaining, but I'm not trying to calm anyone down. I'm trying to stir up trouble. Are you some sort of spastic or something?
The most disappointing thing in the whole world is that yoda'saprentice made no comment about 'AIDS in a car crash' (part of the AIDS bonanza), which I wrote especially for him.
I know. By my calculations, this poeme should have had all the crude, offensive pow'r of 'AIDS in a van' and 'AIDS in a Glass', but someone must have reversed the polarity or something. Fucking Jews.
alright alright people calm down please!!! ok 1 BLADE IS NOT GAY AND LEAVE HIS FRIEND OUT OF THIS LEAVE THEM 2 ALONE THIS I SMY PROBLEM OK DONT BE RUDE TO THEM. THANK YOU DARKANGEL AND WHOEVER IS TRYING TO CALM YOU PEOPLE DOWN. god tingatingle thingy whatever you have some motherfucking nerve and christof me and blade would never hurt you lol i just want poeple to tell how my poems are if they suck well they suck but say it in a way i can try and fix em up not in a motherfucking rude way ok thank you
Why do you think they have trunks? No, wait, sorry, I've gone too far...
So wait - all you have to do to make the worst poem the best poem is make it a great deal longer??? Also - the phrase "fine rhymes" could become a very funny line somewhere (these fine wines/Jean Charles, you fool, don't you spill a precious drop/Jean Charles, you klutz that is the poisoned crouton/Jean Charles, you idiot, fetch the mop before His Highness awakens from his Royal nap)
Either you are brilliant or your school requires you to take a lot of courses you can goof off in. "(Just call it an AIDSketeer's hunch.)" was especially good.
yeah, sure, you go on believing that..
No wait DA, dude, I think you meant to say "Diabetic Verse" or "Malarial Prose" or even "Lou Gherig's Limerics". I am giving you a 0 because to be completely fair most of the votes are out of pity/sympathy. I must admit the work's quite good though.
I suspect that the Child of your Buttocks was really just a metaphor for this poem. I am giving you a ten because I would like to see someone have both the best and worst poem on poemranker.
Childish drivel of the worst sort! I cannot believe that someone would look to the sea for inspiration. The use of parentheses is terrible. Unquestionably the worst poem I have read on Poemranker. Furthermore sir, excuse me, but hurf urf sir you are blocking both BBC1 and BBC2!!
If elephants don't have knees how do they suck eachother off?? Oh wait never mind.
You actually can 'bugger' someone's mouth. It takes some practice though - and you need a full running start.
I know how it feels
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haha that's awesome
I feel this poem was well written, and I know the feeling, I can definitly relate to the message you are trying to get across.