Tintagiles
on Our New Tongue by Christof
23 Oct 2002, 6:20 AM
'The husk of your voice' is wonderful. I rather like this.
I like this but, you've got a bridge AND a fireplace.... I got a little lost somewhere.
-=Dark_Angel=- may like it, but all in all, he's much better at it than you are.
I can't speak as intelligently as Christof yet,but I am impressed. I will be referring to this piece for my own improvements. thanks.9
But Maria does have a point - it's OK to dislkie someone's poem but people do go a bit crzy with abuse. That's just not necessary. AFter all, a person's only written a poem you don't like, they haven't petrol-bombed your house and drowned your kittens in a vat of teir own urine. But maybe I'm just saying this because Ealing isn't far from my home and I don't want Maria and Blade coming over to whack me.
For Christ sake girl, blade is a 17 yr old who is gay!!!. Very scared as you send him e-mail!!!, when he prefers the guys. There is no chance that you could "hook" up with him, as he's always "busy". By the way your poems are good but obsessive!!! Also further more your personal details sound like you want 2 b a tennage porn star
Dude, well-written stuff, but you have some serious issues...
I like it.
Also, socialism only works in heavan where it's not needed and hell where it's already working. Obvioulsy the awful 60 years of communism in Russia and the Eastern Bloc and the slow return to captitalism by China, Vietnam and Cuba mean nothing? Socialism just leads to oppression because with evryone being the same, the need to be better is only intensified.
This irritates me as a subject. There is nothing wrong with being middle class. You find we run many of the businesses and companies employing the worker. Without middle class financial investment the economy would completely collapse. Now the aristocracy, they contribute nothing to economy. Yet we must preserve them as it part of (my) culture. Other than that it is sound.
I don't think it needs an exclamation mark. It was going really well untill the last line, 'he is a winner!' just trivializes it I'm afraid.
Very descriptive. It reminds me why I love Autumn.
Yep, you're right. Should have been "That sweet, sweet poontang".
Still, I think the point gets across adequately
In the name of all that's holy... I haven't watched any of that rubbish, and I'm very glad if bloody Diana's in it. Christ, I bet bloody David Beckham is Number 1. I suppose we get the heroes we deserve...
I don't think they did, but if you leave a piece of cheese long enough I'm sure insects will appear. He's among the top ten Britons as voted by the more cretinous watchers of BBC1. I mean, what the hell is Diana doing on that list?
Did they work out how to do it? That's why they wanted Newton, no doubt. A man of his brain must surely have known how to make insects out of cheese.
You can't beat a good sonnet. It is always sobering to think that all the great poets, from Petrarch and Shakespeare onwards, have used the same form; I cannot possibly compete, but it's fun to try.
This is very tender and I like the rhetorical flourish of the last couplet.
I quite like the idea of doors being by streets, but it probably should be on. By seems a better word to start a poem with, even if it doesn't quite make sense.