jrtails
on Football by Tom Colebrooke
14 Oct 2002, 7:39 AM
Quite good, nice images
Quite right, quite right. Still a baby And in progress. Thanks for the catch.
Yeah! Katie's right! We're a close-knit community of soul-searching poetes! Come on guys, help out Blade and stop poking fun!!
Bravo
Oh good God, no!! Not an "GOWN OF SORROW"!!! I bought my gown from a very disreputable Merchante who had but a badmington racquet where his face should have been. Perhaps it is a GOWN OF SORROW.
Your Sick
Very Funny
It doesn't matter if people don't like your work, jrtails -- three of my poemes were the three worst-rated poemes for a while, but I persevered and look where I am now!! Only halfway down the worst list!!!
You're a TWAT
Not very inventive EH!
you only think i'm nice because you have ignored my comments.
God, won't you guy's please stop bickering...if you haven't noticed the point of this site is to post your poems, and help other peolpe fix theres. Blade, don't listen to some of the asses on this site, It's a nice poem, yes it does need some touchs up, but other than that I like it. I give it a ~*5*~ =)
Quite the impressive piece,sir. Um, my skills are not at this level yet but I tripped over "still feels and think fertile". A typo maybe? I felt the presence of a winery. I enjoy watching you and god's wife banter.
It's funny and I learn small things too. Thanks.
Also P&K, I'm not the bumdoctor, and I'm not frass but it's okay you thought that. I assumed you were a Mr. oTEPdrug at one point but zzinnia quickly corrected me on that. She's a nice lady and I've ignored most of her comments on my work. For this I DAMN MYSELF!
God's wife, This wasn't meant to be a goof poem as Mr P&K said. In fact this is one of my personal favorites. This poem is a metaphor for finding people who have little or no spark in their lives. We poets have a way of reaching people with a few words and I think our talents have gobs-o-merit in the real world.
This is supportive of our craft, sword and shield=pen and pad.
We can make people feel pain, pleasure, lonely , happy and we can celebrate things as simple as coffee. Don't worry about being funny, ask P&K and Dark Angel, they'll tell you I'm not ready for playful jousting yet. Thanks, If I can improve on this piece, let me know.