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replying on On The Bench Outside Gruhn's Guitars by <~>
14 Oct 2002, 6:23 AM
he had just been to see the bum doctor, you see.
Dark Angel, I thought your "bumdoctor" haiku was a stab at my generous scoring of other peoples poems. I see now that to be a bad assumtion. Like I said to Mr. P&K, I started to take things a little too seriously here. I welcome your comments, I'll try to lighten up. Thanks, could you comment on my "frozen beauty" haiku, I'm seriously interested in getting it right.
Yo maria Excellent poem it's real good to see you express yourself this openly and youve got a friend in me
Mr P&K,thank you for your comment, please expound. In ref. to our previous conversation, it appears I have made many foolish assumptions.I welcome comments but have a little trouble differentiating between comments and playful jousting. I also started to take this site and my poetry a little too seriously. I'll try to loosen up in the future, thanks again.
I think you have opened a can of worms here. Dangerously offensive, but then I like work which challenges the stereotype of acceptableness. 7, for sheer bravado.
Sorry, but I just think this is childish pap. Poor structure, very wishy-washy, and very cliched. 1/10
Hmmm. Hints at a dark experience, although sadly for you it is not conveyed well at all. I conclude that this is one of two things: a)the nonsensical ramblings of a moron or b) simply a bad, bad poem. 2/10.
Oh dear God. What have we done?
A missing face? What? I think you win because I have no idea what you're talking about.
Zing!! Way to hit her where it hurts - IN THE NAME.
LOL GOOD ONE! I will thank you, Madam, to address me as "-=Dark_Angel=-" in future.
I use "big words", whatever they might be, because they're the first ones that occur to me. If you like, I'll make sure to replace all words with more than 2 syllables with ones with 2 or fewer syllables when I comment on your poemes! With that in mind, though, could you not use the words "ignorance", "judgemental", "appealing", "simplistic", "audience", "obvious", "constructive", "criticism", "consider", "everyone", "obviously", "intelligent", "corrections", "suggestions", "original", "apologize", "computer", "commentaries", "internet", "compositions" and "marketing"? They hurt my ignintness.
Also, I'd be interested to know where you're getting all this "prefer to use big words to make your work more appealing", "dark and deep", "Marilyn Manson", "black lipstick" stuff from. As far as I can tell you've just invented it on the spot, but if it helps you cope, by all means carry on.
That's rather disappointing.
And moreso, what's with the name, delusions of grandure me thinks
What the fuck are you talking about ????
i haven't cramed ANY fake votes so please get a life and if you are gonna attempt to put down anythink (which i have seen you do quite a lot in here) then please get your facts correct. I HAVE not and WOULD not even consider cheating on anything, let alone on a fuckin poetry site. So, please wipe away the spit you dirty twat.
beautiful!9
The problem is its easy to disapprove of other people's cultural practices. When Britain conquered india, they declared the practice of suttee illegal, and in some ways it became a way of resisting imperial rule. It clearly is barbaric, but attacking it from outside raises comples moral issues.
There's a well-known article by the post-colonial theorist Gayatri Spivak called 'Can the Subaltern Speak?' which addresses this issue, and is very good, if hard going.
"Siempre mientiendo amor" really speaks to my conscience right now. Love is so frgile and dependent on the actors to sustain the illusion. If one decides not to play along anymore, the illusion is broken. I love our back and forth. It is a creative and satisifing business.
Pero si no calmas los enojos. Me dejas ardiente, y deciendo el olvido. Cuantas veces en una sola vida sabre este dulce estar?