crafty

this reads purely as prose, and is rather cliche.

Perfect!I'm happy I checked your poems!and found this strange artistic monument there!(there's no exaggeration on my part,I've read enough poetry to see what is good and what Perfect!)10

Very nice!8

man i wanna crawl up in a corner and die... Well done..!!!!

interesting angle on a subject broached by few and tainted with disdain by maintream media

wonderfull.... i like the rythm... and i love the content... i'm a gemini by the way, so i know what u mean... but i have not yet realized which of the twins is the evil one....

islam and some fucked up maniacs have no connection.... islam like is a great relegion, just like all relegions.... unfornutely it is used too many times as an excuse... but this is noting new.... politics always use organizations for their own requirments... sad world sometimes....

Thanks for your comments. Ummm I hope if I make a couple of suggestions you won't be offended (I fully admit I know nothing about poetry) But if you changed the line ending "horror first began" to "horror did begin" you get a closer match in rhyme. Also the last line should end in the word 'sin' ... something about the night bringing sin maybe Just a couple of thoughts ( :

Ryn: No I'm not Darren Day, whoever that fellow might be. Champagne socialists have always been rather laughable, on both sides of the fence. / :

I understand what you are saying. I dig trenches, you find comfort and seek the innocence in memorys from your past. Both of us avoiding the reality of the present. I can relate.

Thats a good case of the blues brotha. (Please vote on mine, I really dont know ppls opinion)

Thats true in most cases, but I hope thats not everyone (Please people vote on mine, I dont know what people think. THank you)

Very deep and depressing. (Hey everybody, I want to know ur opinion of my poems! Please vote on mine too! thank you very much)

Well this is just utter garbage I mean where was the structure and the meter?...Oh good Lord no this just shan't do...no wait on second read thru...no genius...absolute genius...(Irony Irony Irony) as before love your work...another 10 will do me, Tommy

Well it sorta started quite badly, went no where in the middle and tailed off towards the end but apart from that, splendid...great...sterling effort. No sorry justa touch of wry poet humour there (this is steeped in irony, so please don't hunt me down and slay me) liked it liked it a lot 10 will do me, Tommy!

*speechless* I just don't get it, is this site not governed in any sorta way, mean or fashion!? Why am I being forced to read this, this bile. Y'see what I did there?...huh d'you see it, I took ya down one road just for ya to be dragged back and took down the real road. I tell ya kid you'll go far, it's another 10 that'll do me, Tommy.

Wow, this is so touching... it make me cried. HAHA LOL 7 And seven, you got