Re: a comment on Butterfly Plague by zodiac	zodiac 212.118.19.111	15-Apr-05/10:33 PM
You're a fucking hero.
Re: a comment on Utensils of creation by Damien	zodiac 212.118.19.111	15-Apr-05/10:28 PM
You are a sackfull of various clods.
Re: a comment on Utensils of creation by Damien	zodiac 212.118.19.111	15-Apr-05/10:26 PM
Don't be a fucking moron. And stop making assumptions. For one, I spend all day sitting around a desert, not a computer; for another, it's just more fun to say "fucking moron" than other, equivalent things. If people like you touched a nerve, I would have hemorrhaged to death over poemranker months ago. 1. You couldn't spiritually develop your way out of a damp cardboard box. 2. Why didn't you say so? Cause what you've said is ridiculous. 3. I don't understand what this point's saying. Do you mean that you've almost graduated high school? I got a 1580 on the SAT; what did you get? 4. You're wrong there. Maybe it means I've just run out of non-offensive original ways of saying things. 5. Whatever. Like anyone wants to read your freestyle ramblings.
Re: a comment on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.111	15-Apr-05/10:18 PM
To recap: Dovina: "...The poem, which never said anyone ignored me in his/her poetry." zodiac: "I never said the poem said anyone ignored you. I said it proposes that they ignore you." Seems clear enough to me. Incidentally, I also read this: "He ignored me, didn’t hire me, belittle me in his poetry, skiped over me at his open mic reading. It's all sadly there." So, I don't think you read what you say before spinning off in a completely different direction. Look, I'm putting on my Serious Hat now. I don't much care if anyone did or didn't ignore you, belittle you, etc. That's never been pertinent to anyone but you. I'm telling you, though, that this poem is racist. It doesn't matter if it's about an individual: The Adventures of Huckleberry Finn is racist and it's only about one black individual, Nigger Jim. It doesn't matter if al-naafiiysh, etc, like it and say you're not racist: Nigger Jim liked Huck and Huck was racist. It doesn't matter if its goal (ie, a sense of wrongs retributed or whatever) is unracist: the goal of Affirmative Action is unracist, and Affirmative Action is still racist. As I've said before, the mistakes of this poem are: 1) Placing wrongs against blacks in some vague past (bonus! You were uninvolved.) 2) Taking for granted that blacks today have enough "newfound" power and freedom that they could oppress whites if they wanted to. 3) Thinking that blacks would want to. 4) Thinking you have a place in black culture, community, verse, or readings, when historically black culture has run just finely without you. 5) Thinking a black person belittling you in his verse makes up for 200-something years of slavery, 100 more years of institutionalized segregation, and another fifty of vague badness. All of that's in the poem. Please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please, please believe me.
Re: Dancing by not_a_philosopher	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/10:19 AM
Looks like a textbook example from chem. 101, and almost as boring. "(kicking him in the balls)" is the only saving grace. -6-
Re: a conversation by crooked_smile	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/10:11 AM
Bravo. Could do with another proof read, but still good stuff in my book. Pun not intended. -9- <3 Jason
Re: Looking Over the Blueprints by somemorepoetry	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/10:04 AM
"Of every line, every anlge, every beam and bolt" Angle perhaps? Dovina's right, but I think there was some wonderful craftmanship here. I loved the Wife bit, but I think it's too easy to skip over the subtle comparison of how he was more exact with his work, than his love life. <3 Jason -10-
Re: believing by whispern_smoke_wisp	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/9:56 AM
Peter Pan Logic only works for children. -5-
Re: Spit Factor by [mojo]	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/9:49 AM
"What exactly would you say, If for no reason at all I spat full in your face?" In every scenario, I'd return the favor, save the death one, because well, I'd be dead. I think the last verse needs rethought entirely. The ending left me sourly disappointed. I thought you'd quite a large nut sack, until the last two lines in which apparently you spunked like never before, and lost them. -8-, but I think a rewrite of the entire last verse would make this better. <3 Jason
Re: The Incubation by oneglove	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/9:37 AM
Well wrote. The first two lines were my favorites.
Re: 15 Minute poem by Damien	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/9:33 AM
Ug! I feel like I've just read chapter two of a pretenious novel, written by a big fish from the pond, discovering that there are bigger and meaner fish shortly after finding his way into the lake. My vote is a -8-, just for "I'me". Otherwise, it'd be a five. I think you could develop a knack for writting, if instead of focusing on pissing off your worst critics, You instead tried to improve upon the whatever weakness they start attacking. <3 Jason
Re: a comment on Trying to get signed? by Damien	Goad 213.61.217.3	15-Apr-05/9:23 AM
Stephen, I've always tried my best to make sense, but it's difficult for me. You've never ever shown me the same level of encouragement and support you show the younger, prettier boys, and this frustrates me sometimes to tears. If I'm bitter it's only because of my underlying yearnings.
Re: Trying to get signed? by Damien	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/9:19 AM
I didn't like this. Maybe it's some of the grammer issues, or maybe it's just the underlying tone. I'm sure you've heard of something known as slam poetry, right? I think that's where you should have focused the energy that went into this. I do like the fighting spirit this displays however. Hold onto that, this place gets to be battleground over some of the dumbest reasons. I was most put off by the "stop if you are judging as you scum destroy". This is a ranking site. You will be judged. I can't honestly vote this higher than a 4. Because if a poem is a machine, then it's what it does for us that we are rating. This moved me little. The comments were actually more interesting. <3 Jason
Re: a comment on Trying to get signed? by Damien	Damien 212.248.252.234	15-Apr-05/8:47 AM
You hit the nail on the head. Plus it makes them feel "Hard" E.t.c (F*cking scumbags)
Re: Suicide I by disturbedone182	Goad 213.61.217.3	15-Apr-05/8:35 AM
Don't worry, I personally volunteer to have a fuck when you're gone. Hey -- one excuse to have a fuck is as good as another.
Re: a comment on Trying to get signed? by Damien	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	15-Apr-05/8:31 AM
You're right, it seems like its easier to some people to knock you down rather than build you up. If only everyone could be honest with themsleves and speak from the heart rather than the bottom. It seeems like no one wants to be nice anymore but have to knock people down to make themselves feel better about their inadequacies. :(
Re: a comment on 15 Minute poem by Damien	Damien 212.248.252.234	15-Apr-05/7:26 AM
Thankyou Steve you have just give me one of the biggest confidence boosts I have ever felt. This is exactly what I need to do to make an impact, change peoples view on poetry, thanks again.
Re: a comment on Trying to get signed? by Damien	Damien 212.248.252.234	15-Apr-05/7:24 AM
Thanks stephen again. Listen you are the the type of people that need to infest the world if we are to save it.
Re: 15 Minute poem by Damien	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	15-Apr-05/6:18 AM
Excellent retort. Your open expressions really come through without the use of grammar - It has certainly altered the way I view poetry. -9-
Re: a comment on Trying to get signed? by Damien	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	15-Apr-05/6:15 AM
What are you on about? Goad you really have never made any sense, and now your upsetting new users like damien. I think it's about time we started to foster friendly relations with new users rather than just trumping randomly offensive meaningless vermin-like comments.