Comments byDovina, 2961–2980 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on Returning by Dovina 29 Apr 2005, 6:45 AM
Paradelle of Progress
replying on Returning by Dovina 29 Apr 2005, 6:38 AM
When a spiny caterpiller appears metamorphosed into a gentle butterfly, what is a green leaf to think.
replying on Returning by Dovina 29 Apr 2005, 6:16 AM
It's easy really, when all the other doors are closed.
replying on Returning by Dovina 29 Apr 2005, 6:14 AM
I hadn't thought of it as my best. No matter, thanks for the kudos.
replying on Panama by Dovina 28 Apr 2005, 5:15 AM
The subject of every sentence is either "he" or "she." The phrases following the first line of every verse refer back to the subject. You don't have to like it, but that's the layout.
on Sailor Dress by sunset sky 27 Apr 2005, 7:01 AM
Well told story. Why did she do it? - that's the lingering question.

Welcome to poemranker.
on I killed you in New Mexico by sunset sky 27 Apr 2005, 6:56 AM
Provocative, but lacking whatever it was that connected them and a reason for the love-lilling.
on Lost key for a hall-closet by zodiac 27 Apr 2005, 6:41 AM
Verses 1 and 2 flow well. Verse 3 starts a transition (knew is really known or new) "She's a lowland topography to her life" is good. Some lines seem unrelated, like, "a man never lost without thinking
the word new"
replying on This one the love by thepinkbunnyofdoom 27 Apr 2005, 6:23 AM
Then try Victoria's Secret chaffon panties and matching bra. I believe you'll become more attractive.

I will if you will.
on Ode To The Fly In My Beer by ChaseValentine 26 Apr 2005, 4:55 PM
The last line kills it. Happiness is not at the bottom of a bottle.
on am i right? by celticskatermatt1 26 Apr 2005, 4:51 PM
"will we/they ever see the truth?" is the most overused and senseless line in all of poesy.
replying on Self Conscious by Damien 26 Apr 2005, 2:46 PM
No, no, no. Please read what I said. this poem is only one example of a doward trend, apparently caused by over-sensitive reaction to the criticism you have received.
replying on Self Conscious by Damien 26 Apr 2005, 5:49 AM
Did you read what I said?
replying on This one the love by thepinkbunnyofdoom 25 Apr 2005, 11:08 AM
Amen to that.
on Self Conscious by Damien 25 Apr 2005, 11:05 AM
Frankly, I think you've gone downhill. Your early poems showed a unique, though debatably inadequate style. Then, after much ridicule, you turned another way - not as good, in my opinion, as what you can make of your original stuff. that original style is workable, I think, but needs refinement, which is the hard part. Receiving inspiration is easy; developing craft is not.
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 25 Apr 2005, 8:51 AM
P = Pimple writing simpleton

C = one who Complains about how they get tagged as a result of the pimples they write.

(C implies P) is indeed illogical, even if P implies C.

My most recent whine was not intended to follow logically from your comment, and may be like flogging of a dead horse, but don't you think it has merit? I mean, someone who tags (uses rote clues to classify) is no better and probably worse than someone who whines. Admitedly, the two things may be unrelated.
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 24 Apr 2005, 5:09 PM
Since I'm already tagged as a whiner, what the hell, here's another whine. What you say about tagging works both ways. Is a person who tags any less of a pimple-writing simpleton than than a person who complains about being tagged? I think such a person is more simple than a whiner because he/she has not the strength to look past surface implications while the whiner at least tries to expose charges leveled by the unthinking whose heads are filled with fixed notions.
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 24 Apr 2005, 7:09 AM
That is further support for my growing belief that a middle-aged white American woman can say nothing about our black population without automatically being tagged is some incorrect way.
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 24 Apr 2005, 6:59 AM
2) The tone of the narator is so overly submissive to abuse that a reader has to ask if she is really serious when she says "Go ahead . . ." and "It’s a new experience for me, that’s all. Maybe it’s time."
replying on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina 24 Apr 2005, 6:52 AM
You are saying that my way of expressing a racial issue is naive and that I am not a racist. Good, and quite possibly true. I am coming to disbelieve in the possibility of expressing a racial issue in a passionate way without coming accross as racist. It should be possible, maybe I'll try again.