replying on "oh" by fevriere
23 Dec 2004, 11:45 AM
If it's a simple thing, like a duck eating bread, why complicate it?
Again you have said opposites and then attempted to unite them. Alas, I accept bumness as your most current opinion of me. And as such I write bum poems. Where you get the idea that I think poetry is magical or ephemeral, escapes me.
How well would a painter, or a truckdriver like INTRANSIT, or a sculptor like auscot, or a painter like van Gogh, write poetry. That, of course depends on two things - having the imagination needed to put a well understood profession into commonly understandable terms, and poetic ability. Are we clear now? This whole discussion seems insanely inane. I'm bored!
How well would a painter, or a truckdriver like INTRANSIT, or a sculptor like auscot, or a painter like van Gogh, write poetry. That, of course depends on two things - having the imagination needed to put a well understood profession into commonly understandable terms, and poetic ability. Are we clear now? This whole discussion seems insanely inane. I'm bored!
on Andrew part II by Spindle
22 Dec 2004, 5:23 PM
restrain->restraint
"love's soothing touch AND scalding strike" good line.
It did seem like killing myself the first time he did that. You're right, it's about virginity.
"love's soothing touch AND scalding strike" good line.
It did seem like killing myself the first time he did that. You're right, it's about virginity.
on Disable by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
22 Dec 2004, 5:14 PM
Retibution is only exceeded in sweetness by ridicule.
on Sidestepping Stupor by PsydewaysTears
22 Dec 2004, 10:51 AM
At least you're not assuming we know the setting this time. This is good. Verses 5,6 and 7 need some opening transition, I think.
on The Slave by Bhaskaryya
22 Dec 2004, 10:47 AM
Good.
Line 2 - "And rest"
Ling 3 - "descending."
Line 2 - "And rest"
Ling 3 - "descending."
on I have Learned to Let Go by Joe-joe
22 Dec 2004, 10:43 AM
So your goodbye was not final.
We have two theories here on Poemranker:
1. Poets, who are dim, write nonsense.
2. Poets who are dim write nonsense.
I see -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. adheres to both.
Which do you prefer?
We have two theories here on Poemranker:
1. Poets, who are dim, write nonsense.
2. Poets who are dim write nonsense.
I see -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. adheres to both.
Which do you prefer?
replying on Fugitively Speaking by Dovina
22 Dec 2004, 10:24 AM
Does this mean you will recant and read my poem now and comment on it rather than on how old I am and my general lifetime degree of success and/or failure?
Pardon me, but are you speaking to me? Hey, these new red and green lines are very Christmasey, don't you think? Yes, I believe you are. Thank you for identifying me as a bum, and therefore having a bum idea of poetry. As such, I also make macaroni and cheese, and shall, if you request it, use that ability in the writing of a poem. Merry Christmas.
replying on Center Of The Universe by Dovina
21 Dec 2004, 5:39 PM
Thank you. It's the very part they all complained about.
on Horror at the grotto by scitz
21 Dec 2004, 4:14 PM
funny, sad
on Internet Inspiration (Dovina) revised by jroday
21 Dec 2004, 3:08 PM
Thank you for reposting this and for the kind sentiment.
on Twin Forks by auscot
21 Dec 2004, 3:07 PM
Your best so far. Quite good.
no comma after bring.
"No longer will I look, without regret," is a bit clunky.
no comma after bring.
"No longer will I look, without regret," is a bit clunky.
replying on Magnetic Time by Dovina
21 Dec 2004, 1:46 PM
Thank you, too.
replying on Magnetic Time by Dovina
21 Dec 2004, 1:45 PM
Thank you, Fraser.
on Forgotten Strokes by Beyond_Dreams
21 Dec 2004, 1:44 PM
A bit over the top. A blank canvas sits untouched because it's blank; unveiled, but we see it. Tears overflowing from what? Palette decorated nightmarish dreams, and starlit eyes - outside then. Still a haunting vision.