poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Dovina (4481-4500) and replies

Comments byDovina, 4481–4500 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

replying on Center Of The Universe by Dovina 1 Jul 2004, 4:10 PM
I think the point you think I am making is not the point I make.
replying on Center Of The Universe by Dovina 1 Jul 2004, 4:02 PM
"All animals are equally deserving of life." That is my notion, you say. Nay, my good sir, all animals think they are deserving of life, except some humans. The poem is not a political statement, as I am so often praised, but a look at the universe through insect's eyes.
replying on Lady Bradbury’s Excursion by Dovina 1 Jul 2004, 2:36 PM
If I change "Dark Journey" to "Angelically Dark Journey," would you make it a ten?
on Helo everybody is limerck time!! by DR Limerick 1 Jul 2004, 2:32 PM
Funny. Why the ?? at the end?
replying on Center Of The Universe by Dovina 1 Jul 2004, 2:24 PM
Thanks for your comments. I don't try to save insects, but, illogically, I like whales and sea turtles. It's about inate selfishness and the comedy of importance each of us assumes or must accept, or is trapped into its service.
on Recycled Stardust by Quarton 1 Jul 2004, 1:35 PM
Good Title. Good ending. In the middle, you have some good lines, but the flow bogs in side issues and themes not very well connected to the main story. Not that they don't connect, I'd just work on how you connect them. Especially like, "when reality becomes fantasy and perhaps returns back to reality once again."
replying on a Waste of Space by thepinkbunnyofdoom 1 Jul 2004, 9:05 AM
You over-compliment me. I mean only that I get as much out of this as from most of the other poems I've read here lately.
on a Waste of Space by thepinkbunnyofdoom 30 Jun 2004, 1:22 PM
Yes, I read it anyway, and it's as good as most of what's come down lately.
on finally i say goodbye by francis nor capule 30 Jun 2004, 1:04 PM
Though this appears to be heartfelt and a thought worthy of poetry, the presentation falls short of one of the best definitions of love I've read and a touching ode to a fallen sister, both by the same poet. It's not just you; a spirit of depression seems gripping poemranker like a disease in a beehive. I feel like a prodical daughter returning to find the houses boarded up and the homefolk moping around.
Nay, my good sir, this is the epitome of great poetry. Each line should be savored and critiqued, metaphored in our own attempts to match its hugeness. Look again, pray, with eyes enlightened.
on The Weaver's Curse by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 29 Jun 2004, 4:23 PM
The Mother's Curse

A noise in the dark
I tremble in sheer terror -
An escaped son?
on Little Girl by hbhpoems 29 Jun 2004, 4:01 PM
This is good, except for telling her what to do in the last two lines.
replying on Revision by Dovina 29 Jun 2004, 9:23 AM
Yes, repulsed is better. And I was not telling so much as screaming. The opposite of seduced is most modern sonnets.
replying on Sustained by Dovina 28 Jun 2004, 1:28 PM
I’m happy to hear that we can cut the crap and get on with poetry. Yes, I’d like to hear what you think of Quiet, Kind Hills, and anything I post. Your comments can be very useful.
replying on Tough by Dovina 28 Jun 2004, 11:54 AM
Shuushin, Shin Shuu, now ZamZara, next Zara Zam, thanks for noticing a telling line.
replying on Sustained by Dovina 28 Jun 2004, 11:51 AM
Alright, with is not the word to start with, and ending is bad for the ending, perhaps then I'll find gerunial liking. But then I'm always telling. How's my spelling?
on Break by Torok 28 Jun 2004, 7:53 AM
Just a preachy thing that doesn't get at any of the problems you say "we" must solve.
on your best friend by New Life Drug 28 Jun 2004, 7:43 AM
Missing someone. Not very well told.
replying on Tough by Dovina 27 Jun 2004, 7:45 PM
Guess I need to clarify the time gap, the change in me, and another young guy with a tough air. Thanks.
on A story of recognition by DeadtotheWorld 26 Jun 2004, 4:28 PM
In spite of a dozen or more spelling and grammar problems, I think I got the point.