on Mask by sk8boardandpoems
4 Sep 2003, 5:07 PM
The second line has to be the worst grasping for a rhyme I have seen in my life.
on hehehe by Freethinker1602
4 Sep 2003, 5:09 PM
No good, but it's great fun.
on Sing to the Past by marvelis
29 Sep 2003, 9:32 PM
I can't decide whether the second line is brilliant or the most idiotic thing I've read in the last twenty-four hours.
on some deleted poem
29 Aug 2003, 8:57 PM
Yes, yes, yes, I KNOW it's silly, pointless, melodramatic, and, for that matters, makes no sense. I was just trying to see if I could write a poem of more than twelve lines in this scheme, that's all.
on I Usually Wear Pants by razorgrin
9 Sep 2003, 9:10 AM
Perhaps, dearlink, but with the pants you wear, you still have to make sure you've got your coat behind you every time you sit down...
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2003, 8:30 PM
DISCLAIMER: despite all appearances, Howard Phillips Lovecraft, his various minions, and all Cthulhu cultists (even of the plush variety) had no inspirational role in the creation of this poeme that I'm aware of.
on Mississipi Murder by scitz
4 Sep 2003, 5:10 PM
A line break does not a comma necessitate.
on Iterated Fuck by nentwined
4 Sep 2003, 5:17 PM
I'd like it a hell of a lot more if the word 'Cum' never appeared. 'Come' I might forgive, but never 'cum'.
on cold sonnet by <~>
4 Sep 2003, 5:03 PM
It seems dreadfully snarky to quote you something you once said to me, dear Tilde, but...
"i'm awash in the imagery, but it's a tsunami".
"i'm awash in the imagery, but it's a tsunami".
on Loki's Tryst by OneFingerAnswer
31 Aug 2003, 9:28 PM
Hmm. I'm not sure I'm convinced. Perhaps this is because it's not my favourite bit of the whole leadup to Ragnarok, possibly because I know so many wonderful prose versions of it that seeing it put into rhyme seems a little wrong, somehow. I dunno... it's not that's it's bad or anything, but it leaves me rather cold.
on Severe Acute Respiratory Syndrome by Stephen Robins
11 Apr 2003, 3:40 PM
For some reason, I've always been making SARS rhyme with arse. But it works said like that too.
on some deleted poem
5 Oct 2003, 8:39 PM
DISCLAIMER: I personally believe this to be an absolutely dreadful poeme. I only posted it here as it was the easiest way to get an acquaintance of mine to read it. At her special request, I'm going to keep it up, despite its evident mediocrity. It's nothing but a silly, pretentious rant about how I haven't been able to write any music in weeks. I meant it to serve as therapy, and it didn't even do that.
on Rain by frostygirl
14 Nov 2003, 7:23 PM
Potential.
on Untitled # 112 by nightii
14 Nov 2003, 7:25 PM
I can't decide whether this is brilliant or bullshit. I'll give you the benefit of the doubt.
on The Case Begins.... by Emotionz
19 Feb 2004, 7:12 PM
Lose the last line.
on Loneliness by tuthaliash
20 Apr 2004, 7:20 PM
Hmm. On the one hand, as hypatia said, you could turn it into a haoku, thus:
With furtive passion
I kiss the back of my hand
And spoon my pillow
That, however, would have the result of its ending with the line 'I spoon my pillow'. Which is going to turn this into a comedy, which I presume is not the intent.
With furtive passion
I kiss the back of my hand
And spoon my pillow
That, however, would have the result of its ending with the line 'I spoon my pillow'. Which is going to turn this into a comedy, which I presume is not the intent.
on some deleted poem
25 Apr 2004, 10:22 PM
As thoughts, amusing. As poetry, shite.
on some deleted poem
26 Apr 2004, 7:13 PM
Did you recite this aloud as you left?
on LOVE-ABOVE LISTE by Everyone
30 Apr 2004, 5:17 PM
Bwahahahahahaha. Beyond classic.