poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Dental Panic (61-80) and replies

Comments byDental Panic, 61–80 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on Flow by zodiac 11 Jan 2006, 3:47 PM
Recently I had a debate with someone over the use of 'this (is)' in a poem. I always wonder what happens when you pull it out - because there's always something happening. To me 'this (is)' is like a pointing finger, it's outside of the poem. The other party didn't agree. To him it was something he used frequently, without any objections. He liked the rhythm of it, and the decisiveness. I think he would have used your poem to prove his point. But maybe I would have too.
I've got a problem with 'she dreams'/'she thinks'.


replying on cat by Dental Panic 11 Jan 2006, 3:24 PM
Thanks very much.
replying on cat by Dental Panic 11 Jan 2006, 3:10 PM
You should try 'Epiphany' by David Hewson then.
replying on cat by Dental Panic 11 Jan 2006, 3:08 PM
Well - it originally was intended to be a poem about..anyway, it slipped off track and I ended up with this, don't know what to think of it. I like it and I don't like it.
on Blackout, Amman, November, 2005 by zodiac 24 Nov 2005, 6:13 PM
great poem.
on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy 24 Nov 2005, 6:08 PM
here'a link to the Laibach version: http://media.putfile.com/Laibach57

hope it works
on I'm too friggin' rich to even title this poem by T. Jonathron Remp 15 Aug 2005, 4:52 AM
Just saw the movie - good fun.
on More drugs. by darby pyn 1 Aug 2005, 5:20 PM
'while you spin in your skin' - best part.
on Wars Between Held Breath's by thepinkbunnyofdoom 1 Aug 2005, 4:59 PM
Great title.
replying on Observation of a stupéfait by Dental Panic 1 Aug 2005, 4:54 PM
I give you the apostrophe. Not the periods. The sentences have been cut by the stanzas. Why? Because of my breathing, I think.
As for the meaning of the poem, well, I'm afraid that if I try to explain it I'll ruin my chances of getting across what doesn't seem to make sense. If you know what I mean.
replying on Endurance by Dovina 9 Jul 2005, 5:22 PM
I see.
on Endurance by Dovina 9 Jul 2005, 4:40 PM
I'm in the dark. It seems a very private thing to me, with strange imagery.
replying on Lover by Dental Panic 9 Jul 2005, 4:28 PM
I’ve made some changes. I think it’s a bit more clear now. I’m still not satisfied though.
The part about the bus is important to me. There’s got to be some element of choice in the whole thing.
replying on pop by Dental Panic 6 Jul 2005, 12:38 PM
Thanks. To me it's like stripping a thing until nothing but the thing itself is left, something like that.
replying on pop by Dental Panic 6 Jul 2005, 12:35 PM
If Frank leaves you in the dark, maybe you should try to find a door. Like 'The Day Lady Died', that's a beautiful poem.
replying on pop by Dental Panic 4 Jul 2005, 1:11 PM
you're welcome.
on Today is very far away from a good day by Prince of Void 21 Jun 2005, 2:42 PM
better go easy on the tears.
on Father’s Day by Dovina 21 Jun 2005, 2:35 PM
I don't think this is a poem. It's more like a sermon.
A poem has at least two faces. A sermon only one.
on Flicking by INTRANSIT 21 Jun 2005, 2:27 PM
Nice. I should skip the amazement: if it's there, the poem should prove it. Not your telling me.
on Wash by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 21 Jun 2005, 1:54 PM
Don't care much for those animals. Who does? But the Lost Socks - now there's one of life's great mysteries. Two go in - one comes out.