replying on trully, madly, deeply by Blindpoetry
11 Nov 2005, 7:33 AM
He's saved from copywrite violations because he can't spell "truly" (unless he meant to put the word "trull" in. Then he's just saying she's a whore, which would give him something in common with the young poet posted beneath me).
What a pathetic prophecy. I'd never see these things coming.
Try something like: Dovina and Zodiac marry after she runs over his Jetta with her truck and they see each other for the first time. On their wedding night they engage in the rare cannibalerotica in which they devour each other from the toes up until there is nothing left but their heads left. The remaining few seconds of their lives are subsequently spent bickering with each other.
Now that's a fuckin' prophecy
Try something like: Dovina and Zodiac marry after she runs over his Jetta with her truck and they see each other for the first time. On their wedding night they engage in the rare cannibalerotica in which they devour each other from the toes up until there is nothing left but their heads left. The remaining few seconds of their lives are subsequently spent bickering with each other.
Now that's a fuckin' prophecy
replying on phases of futility... by Bhaskaryya
11 Nov 2005, 7:05 AM
Me? I prefer my women just lightly salted.
replying on phases of futility... by Bhaskaryya
10 Nov 2005, 8:21 AM
I meant in the first line.
The part about your personal life was in jest also but you see how hard it is to convey comedy under the restrictions of literature. Some people on Poemranker never realize others can't hear the sarcasm or deadpan or teasing that they hear in their thoughts while writing their quips.
Anyhow, no harm no foul.
Anyhow, no harm no foul.
replying on Szaehling by MacFrantic
10 Nov 2005, 5:03 AM
So you're Jack Kerouac.
on phases of futility... by Bhaskaryya
10 Nov 2005, 4:55 AM
First stanza is great. although the "..." may be over doing it a little. The other 2 stanzas aren't quite as good.
replying on the band by celticskatermatt1
9 Nov 2005, 7:17 PM
I just found out it is. For God sakes child hurry and delete your comment. Oh God I can't bare to look!
replying on the band by celticskatermatt1
9 Nov 2005, 7:12 PM
If it's through Poetry.com do yourself a favor and delete your comment by clicking the red x by reply or else prepare yourself for disappointment.
on Forgive Me by TLRufener
9 Nov 2005, 8:02 AM
Answer:
"Some day, and that day may never come, I will call upon you to do a service for me..."
"Some day, and that day may never come, I will call upon you to do a service for me..."
replying on I LOVE A PROSTITUTE by Bhaskaryya
9 Nov 2005, 7:47 AM
You do have potential.
Oh a warning. If you nitpick little things like spelling in peoples comments and replies (unless for comedic reasons like when for instance a girl writes calk when what she really wants is cock) then folks will stop bothering to talk to you altogether. Which may or may not explain your popularity in your personal life.
replying on the band by celticskatermatt1
9 Nov 2005, 7:07 AM
Just wait till you hit 30 my friend.
replying on I LOVE A PROSTITUTE by Bhaskaryya
9 Nov 2005, 7:03 AM
There's no concrete evidence to support Mary Magdalene was even a prostitute. It's just as likely she was the mother of The Christ's child that is if you choose to be at the other gullible end of the spectrum. Hey, I've come to realize that just about every Indian (is that the right term) I've met has had a better english vocabulary then most southerners. I myself don't know a damn word of indian.
on Alone With Memories by Mona Lisa
8 Nov 2005, 3:25 PM
replying on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina
8 Nov 2005, 1:30 PM
I didn't omit you from the genre. But admit it. No body does crap like DA.
replying on the band by celticskatermatt1
8 Nov 2005, 1:15 PM
Dough!! My bad.
replying on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina
8 Nov 2005, 12:21 PM
That would be DA's genre.