on Read this by Southern_Bell
18 Jan 2006, 9:37 AM
The statement is too true, but the poem is crap.
on Three Skinheads by Caducus
18 Jan 2006, 9:36 AM
Some very good lines in here, although a lot of the verses seem to be built around this lines, condensing it could improve the experience for people like me.
on Is Dying Ugly? by D. $ Fontera
18 Jan 2006, 9:34 AM
You have put such minimal thought into this poem, and such minimal effort into making it a poem.
on the black light by crwncka1
18 Jan 2006, 9:32 AM
Interesting as a story, but the repetition of words to be creepy comes off making it sound like it should be read to scare children on halloween.
on Comment on Avian 'flu by Stephen Robins
11 Jan 2006, 1:16 AM
You bastard
on Uncontrolled scribblings one luch break by Nicholas Jones
10 Jan 2006, 2:52 AM
Fresh, and spattered with emotions and scraps of thoughts that seem like they have gone straight from the head to the page.
replying on Sunlighting by ALChemy
10 Jan 2006, 2:44 AM
And is this all because I didnt like your poem?
replying on Sunlighting by ALChemy
10 Jan 2006, 1:36 AM
On a more philosophical note, are you sure children should be the most important priority in life? Should it not be peoples happiness or perhaps something more spiritual, that may result in giving children a happy start to life being important, or am I just banging on about something I know nothing about, since I dont have children yet.
on portrait of powerlessness by digipoet
10 Jan 2006, 1:28 AM
Didn't like ending on the word sadism, would have voted [8-9] if the last line was secrecy, sadism, shame
replying on Slaves and their Serpents by cyan9
10 Jan 2006, 1:24 AM
Oh help me, I am so offended, no, Please dont call me stupid, what shall I do??
replying on floss every day by digipoet
10 Jan 2006, 1:22 AM
Dont you have a job?
on the light of a truly bright day by digipoet
10 Jan 2006, 1:21 AM
Accurate description, but the bullet like/ rapid statements dont bring you out into the bright day, a softer final sentance might add some relief e.g The persistance of night was overcome, I'm sure with nicer language you could do better than that example, but I do think the structure could be altered to massively improve this piece
replying on Sunlighting by ALChemy
10 Jan 2006, 1:15 AM
It is something that now that it is pointed out becomes more apparent to me. Not being a Uncle for another 3 months though means that it is something that I have experienced from time to time, and dont connect with quickly.
replying on Sunlighting by ALChemy
10 Jan 2006, 1:12 AM
I thought, I might embarrass myself (It reads very nicely now)
replying on floss every day by digipoet
9 Jan 2006, 6:34 AM
or just dull enougth to expend time writing about flossing, or even dull enougth to expend time researching statistics on people writing poetry on flossing on this site.
on floss every day by digipoet
9 Jan 2006, 6:30 AM
Making the peice more repetetive could add to its OCD like content
on portrait of powerlessness by digipoet
9 Jan 2006, 6:29 AM
Venomous
on do i know you? by daggatolar
9 Jan 2006, 6:28 AM
This looks and even sounds like it has a meaning or is expressing something, in fact on 2nd read I think I got it. Like the unrecognizing part, in fact its growing on me, especially now the title. As a poem it is not too hot, but it stimulates and has drawn me in and conjured images and thoughts much more than most poems.
Reticent to the sparks -> The statues were shy to the sparks
Its about working for / being tested by a master/maker figure, but receiving only chance rewards i.e. there is no certainty that their actions in doing good / avoiding evil will lead to reward.