on Lovers east of the Coombe by Caducus
30 Jun 2006, 9:20 AM
Lovely imagery.
on Songs of the hedge bird by ALChemy
3 Jul 2006, 7:13 AM
All I can say Al, is that it's beautiful.
on The Last of The Winds by emilyowey
18 Jun 2006, 11:07 PM
Its a nice idea but ends in being an okay-okay poem.
on slice of moonlight by lmp
19 Jun 2006, 8:10 AM
Beautiful.... This got straight to my heart.
on Field Of Surnames by Caducus
18 Jun 2006, 11:04 PM
Somehow I get the feeling of being in a cemetary.
on A Little War Victim by amanda_dcosta
25 Jun 2006, 9:19 AM
Thanks Al.
As for the last lines... it merely means.... come and take me away lest I'm history.
As for the last lines... it merely means.... come and take me away lest I'm history.
on End by MacFrantic
18 Jun 2006, 10:55 PM
I fell that this could be an excerpt from a story. somehow it gives me an eerie feeling. I don't particularly like death themes esp when settled around brutality.
on A Little War Victim by amanda_dcosta
26 Jun 2006, 8:46 AM
I read this out to my five year old and the first thing he says after I read it is... "what is her name?"
Would anyone like to do the honors and name this unfortunate nameless child of my poem?
Would anyone like to do the honors and name this unfortunate nameless child of my poem?
on Be The One by forsaken
18 Jun 2006, 11:20 PM
Looks like you're a loser at love that you're poems are written to beckon someone in particular. It doesn't seem that you've got her. (No offence meant).
on A Love Potion by forsaken
18 Jun 2006, 11:18 PM
A nice title. And a good read.
But there seems to be no consistencey in time and metre and its as if some lines are like chewing gum. They've been pulled and stretched.
But there seems to be no consistencey in time and metre and its as if some lines are like chewing gum. They've been pulled and stretched.
on Money Back by drnick
22 Jun 2006, 10:49 PM
Hmmmmm. I like the last two lines that sum up the first six lines . Other than that I ain't relating much to it although I get the scene. Sorry to disappoint.
on canada day by Bill Z Bub
1 Jul 2006, 5:52 AM
not very impressive to me.
on some deleted poem
26 Jun 2006, 8:39 AM
It's a nice setting.... one that got me thinking. My kids often play with toy guns and I think from now on,watching my kids play, what's going to play on my mind is this..... somewhere, somebody will never become old due to probably my encouraging my kids to becoming so insensitive to violence and war. I think I need to do something about it, in my own way.
on Herencia Latina by Ranger
6 Jun 2006, 10:30 AM
Ranger, this is wonderful. A riddle poem, I must say. If it wasn't for Imp's insight I was getting quite distracted by Dovina's ideas, wondering what in the world could you be so precisely explaining. Am not familiar with viole, is it to do with a shade of violet? Am clueless.
on comfort by the indign
30 Jun 2006, 8:42 AM
This is pretty good. I would also like it if you'd use upper case letter whereever necessary. I like the theme you chose and how you've presented it.
on Fallen Charub by Dovina
30 Jun 2006, 10:49 AM
ha ha ha ha... sorry but don't get me wrong. I'm laughing all over.