on Childhood Memories by Jessina
25 Oct 2008, 4:06 AM
Hi Jess, good to see you around. What's happening and how have you been ? Good to see your poem here.
I think I read this many times and fail to see how I didnt comment on it. Its lovely writing.
BTW - I tried mailing you a couple of times on your social network page and your mailing add, but it looks like you dont use them anymore. however , if you get this message, send me a test mail. Anyway, hows everything and what's happening with you.
BTW - I tried mailing you a couple of times on your social network page and your mailing add, but it looks like you dont use them anymore. however , if you get this message, send me a test mail. Anyway, hows everything and what's happening with you.
Hi D. i remember cheering for you on your 200th poem, and here I see you've done another 100. Way to go girl. But what is this I read 'Amanda Dcosta has gone to heaven'? LOL. I was highly amused with that statement.
Ok... guess its time for Amanda Dcosta to step down from heaven and return to our PR World. You guys have been missing me for long..... Hello everyone... good to see you all. Cheers to PR. I'm back !!!
Ok... guess its time for Amanda Dcosta to step down from heaven and return to our PR World. You guys have been missing me for long..... Hello everyone... good to see you all. Cheers to PR. I'm back !!!
on What you wana hang out later? by T. Jonathron Remp
25 Jul 2008, 4:24 AM
Am left wondering what this 'what you' is about ...
on Question by half.italian
25 Jul 2008, 4:25 AM
Interesting.
on The Man Who Drooped by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
25 Jul 2008, 4:30 AM
A lovely read.
on The Happy Side of Misery by Dovina
22 May 2007, 9:35 AM
Have to be honest with you. I don't get half of it. I get the first two verses, but then? It's very abstract to me... and perhaps needs a bit of explanation for a simple girl like me.
on Sunset Beach by amanda_dcosta
4 Aug 2007, 8:31 AM
I have now changed Stanza 3 line 1 to read "Seagulls in shades of while", which originally read "seagulls in pearly whites". Maybe this is a better option. What do you think?
on some deleted poem
4 Aug 2007, 9:19 AM
hahaha.. i found this very amusing. and just for that very reason I'll give you a ten.... :-)
on Beggar by MacFrantic
4 Aug 2007, 9:26 AM
Too much emphasis on the word beggar. And yes, it rings quite clear that this beggar wants to remain a beggar.
I like the half rhymes you use.... but still think you could come up with something better than ...'travels on to something rural.'
I like the half rhymes you use.... but still think you could come up with something better than ...'travels on to something rural.'
on Home coming of her love by Jessina
2 Dec 2007, 10:02 AM
Hmmm... Jessina, Here are a few things I would take note of.... avoiding the 'ing' form of the words, like beginning with Sighing.
For eg. ... just a suggestion,
She sighs profoundly and saunters
Down the corridor of her chamber.
Her movement was slow
Like a weary itinerant.
Lost in a world of sheeer gloom,
She lounges restively on stairs so plume
Quivers in hoary morn
And clinches her ruddy coverlet.
There seems to be a slight conflict in tenses.... for which you have to be careful about. But, nice choice of words.
For eg. ... just a suggestion,
She sighs profoundly and saunters
Down the corridor of her chamber.
Her movement was slow
Like a weary itinerant.
Lost in a world of sheeer gloom,
She lounges restively on stairs so plume
Quivers in hoary morn
And clinches her ruddy coverlet.
There seems to be a slight conflict in tenses.... for which you have to be careful about. But, nice choice of words.
on harvest moon by Caducus
8 Mar 2009, 12:13 AM
Imagery is good, though I believe it picked up pace only by the second half.
on Poemranker is Back! by Dovina
19 Jul 2010, 10:39 PM
Yay indeed! :)
on The still wheel by Caducus
19 Jul 2010, 10:57 PM
Nicely written. I could see where this was going and you have the imageery done well too; but I'd rather you lose some of the unnecessary words like.... 'so she knew he was', 'she had outlived them all' and instead just give a full impact imagery in phrase form. Losing some of those unnecessary words would make it more impressive than it already is.
on Song of Creation by amanda_dcosta
22 Apr 2011, 2:13 PM
Glossary of music terms:
Legato - string of notes, Fortissimo - very loud sound, Piano - soft (sound), Dolce - sweet, Mezzo-forte - moderately loud, Maestoso - majestically , forte - very loud, Silenzio - silence
Legato - string of notes, Fortissimo - very loud sound, Piano - soft (sound), Dolce - sweet, Mezzo-forte - moderately loud, Maestoso - majestically , forte - very loud, Silenzio - silence
on some deleted poem
27 Apr 2011, 3:13 AM
Here's my guide on "How to write a Shakespearean sonnet" for those who might be interested.
http://poetry.helium.com/how-to/12786-ho
http://poetry.helium.com/how-to/12786-ho
on Munnar -a must -see destination by Jessina
16 Sep 2011, 1:25 PM
I know Munnar... so I can connect with its landscape. but from just the description, it doesn't take me there poetically, although you may rhyme. While reading it I was looking for something that would make me say WOW as in 'yes, this is the poetry-inspiring MUNNAR'.... apart from the generalized description that every traveler to Munnar posts. I know you added some adjectives to describe it, but sometimes the reader wants more than a description. We want to find the poet in the poem.
on A mag that PAYS??? by SupremeDreamer
13 May 2013, 10:09 AM
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