on Sonnet 5 (The Second Deluge) by Schlinkey
3 Dec 2006, 2:08 AM
I admire anyone who can write a beautiful sonnet, for this is something I have not achieved yet. You have done a swell job at it and hence I choose not to be too critical about its contents.
on Instruction by Dovina
3 Dec 2006, 1:48 AM
I kinda wonder how you come up with the contents you write. Pretty good , I must say.
on And She Came Back by Enkidu
3 Dec 2006, 2:03 AM
Hmmm.. I think this could be shortened to contain less detail and more impact.
on some deleted poem
7 Dec 2006, 5:42 AM
Great work Paul. It's quite a while since I read some of your work. Good to see this post.
on Self Portrait by Dovina
7 Dec 2006, 5:49 AM
Beautiful insight.
on some deleted poem
11 Jan 2007, 9:35 PM
Could improve on this.
on some deleted poem
11 Jan 2007, 9:37 PM
You had a nice idea conveyed in the beginning.. but it sort of gave way by the second half, kinda like it didn't hold together that strong.
on some deleted poem
11 Jan 2007, 9:43 PM
Very good imagery here.
on some deleted poem
11 Jan 2007, 9:31 PM
Very emphatic. A message well sent. A good write, Paul.
on some deleted poem
11 Jan 2007, 9:33 PM
Sweet.
on some deleted poem
8 Feb 2007, 3:04 AM
A good write.
Am I the only one to understand what you mean with all these flowers... dried or ascii. I'm happy to see this post and it gives me a nostalgic feel although the flowers are yours. Too bad that the string of ascii characters didn't come an angel's way, at least not yet.
on some deleted poem
8 Feb 2007, 3:15 AM
Hi rockmage. I've seen your votes on my pages and thought you didn't seem to like my stuff. A zero on every poem. Am disappointed, but thanks for the attention.
on The Editor by Dovina
9 May 2007, 10:05 AM
Good imagery D. Happy to read one of your poems after a long time. Sorry for the negligence. Hope you are having a whale of a time on the road. Praying for your safety.
on A twisted Trail in Edenâs Garden by Dovina
18 May 2007, 5:38 AM
Hmmm.. lemme see. Quite a few points came to mind when I read this. First of all, I like the theme. Secondly, I like the similar syllables used like... suckered, sold and saddened... and verdict, vouched and valid. Thirdly... its very good imagery you've pictured there at the end, ie. the last two lines. Very emphatic. Good work.
Apart from that its a nice sentiment, very true, but with spelling errors.