on some deleted poem
4 Jun 2003, 5:09 PM
1. Make the first verse's rhythm less insipid.
2. Remove 'mere'.
3. Don't let anyone stand in the way of your dreams!!!
2. Remove 'mere'.
3. Don't let anyone stand in the way of your dreams!!!
on sharkmouth by Bill Z Bub
7 Jun 2003, 7:16 PM
This poeme contains the word 'shark' which is contained in the username 'darkshark' which contains the word 'dark' which is also in the username '-=Dark_Angel=-'. A little suspicious, don't you think?
on Bad Timing by DeadtotheWorld
4 Jun 2003, 7:42 PM
Well this is better than 90% of the stuff on poemeranker. I suppose that means I should rate it 9.
on some deleted poem
9 Jun 2003, 6:47 PM
What would you say if I told you I had transcribed this poeme onto a fine linen handkerchief, used it for an Embrowning, then placed it into a moist knapsack and stored it in a special drawer?
on Beam reach by INTRANSIT
9 Jun 2003, 9:39 AM
An Unfortunate Gybing Incident (Horror) by -=Dark_Angel=-
Ready about! Lee ho!
*squelch*
O Jesu, what have I done....
Ready about! Lee ho!
*squelch*
O Jesu, what have I done....
on A Perfectly Reasonable Question by baughworm
6 Jun 2003, 1:25 PM
Is the question "Tea?"?
Waiting at the kitchen table to tell someone off is one of the worst things in the world.
Waiting at the kitchen table to tell someone off is one of the worst things in the world.
on The Truth of Death by Schizophrenic
6 Jun 2003, 2:38 PM
Death metal lyrics only have a point when accompanied by actual death metal.
on The Outcry by thepinkbunnyofdoom
4 Jun 2003, 8:02 PM
A bold new sentiment! This is the first time anyone has ever expressed misgivings toward technology!!
on some deleted poem
4 Jun 2003, 7:16 PM
Oh holy jesus, a love "song" by John K. My monocle has popped off in surprise.
on Iterated Fuck by nentwined
4 Jun 2003, 12:45 PM
After discovering the audiostatic recordings of poemes on your website, I was disappointed to find that 'Iterated Fuck' was not among them. How dearly I would love to hear this read out in nentwined's sumptuous, erotic tones!
Alas, I could not wait. Here is a recording I have made which represents, I believe, what it would sound like.
http://darkangel.illfuckinghostit.com/bu
Alas, I could not wait. Here is a recording I have made which represents, I believe, what it would sound like.
http://darkangel.illfuckinghostit.com/bu
on E tu trabajo el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}>
4 Jun 2003, 12:36 PM
"Making me who I am, not what I am liable to do."
Surely the fact that you have written this poeme contradicts the idea that your magical experiences are so ineffable as to not affect your behaviour.
Surely the fact that you have written this poeme contradicts the idea that your magical experiences are so ineffable as to not affect your behaviour.
on Dying In Silk (senryu) by scitz
4 Jun 2003, 9:45 AM
a bit short
on 11th September (a senyru) by scitz
4 Jun 2003, 9:47 AM
quite vivid but again a little too short.
on Crush Rejected by thepinkbunnyofdoom
5 Jun 2003, 3:54 PM
The phrase "my eyes bleed tears" is plagiarised from the following poeme by Roger Pfingston:
http://www.2river.org/2RView/5_2/poems/p
http://www.2river.org/2RView/5_2/poems/p
on some deleted poem
9 Jun 2003, 6:45 PM
balls
ass
balls and ass
balls balls ass ass
balls and ass
ass
balls and ass
balls balls ass ass
balls and ass
on some deleted poem
4 Jun 2003, 7:36 PM
John K Song Extract Megapost
I thought it was time John K finally got some recognition among the serious poetes of the site, and the best way to do that seems to showcase the stunning variety of subject matter and style he has mastered.
Here, then, is a selection of extracts I feel really show what his songs have to offer! Remember, each of these is from a different song! ENJOY!!!!!!!!!!!!11111
"We’ll have the chance, another day
To sing and dance, to laugh and play"
"I know I need - you’re gentle touch
I guess that I - love you too much"
"Because she gives me a reason to get out of bed
And I just can't seem to get her out of my head"
"You are my reason to get out of bed
You're the person stuck in my head"
"Now we're just friends
I thought that it would never end"
"She makes me feeel like I'm on top of the world
She makes me feel like I don't need another girl"
"Have you ever seen two people madly in love?
They've been given a gift from their God above"
"I hope you know, how I feel about you
I love you girl, and I wish you knew"
"I used to be captivated by you
But now I know that we are through"
"I can't forget you, I can only try
I will remember you until I die"
"As I stand here watching my heart bleed
I know you’re the only one I need"
"A can of beer, that's all it will take
To make you steer in the wrong direction and break"
"No body sees you as you see yourself
You always act like you're somebody else"
"I never knew how much you meant to me
Never knew what you could do for me"
"I should've known better than to tell a lie
That doesn't mean you should say goodbye"
"I hope you know, how I feel about you
I love you girl, and I wish you knew"
BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH A
BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH A
YADDA YADDA YADDA B
DINGLE PRINGLE CAN'T U C
10!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I thought it was time John K finally got some recognition among the serious poetes of the site, and the best way to do that seems to showcase the stunning variety of subject matter and style he has mastered.
Here, then, is a selection of extracts I feel really show what his songs have to offer! Remember, each of these is from a different song! ENJOY!!!!!!!!!!!!11111
"We’ll have the chance, another day
To sing and dance, to laugh and play"
"I know I need - you’re gentle touch
I guess that I - love you too much"
"Because she gives me a reason to get out of bed
And I just can't seem to get her out of my head"
"You are my reason to get out of bed
You're the person stuck in my head"
"Now we're just friends
I thought that it would never end"
"She makes me feeel like I'm on top of the world
She makes me feel like I don't need another girl"
"Have you ever seen two people madly in love?
They've been given a gift from their God above"
"I hope you know, how I feel about you
I love you girl, and I wish you knew"
"I used to be captivated by you
But now I know that we are through"
"I can't forget you, I can only try
I will remember you until I die"
"As I stand here watching my heart bleed
I know you’re the only one I need"
"A can of beer, that's all it will take
To make you steer in the wrong direction and break"
"No body sees you as you see yourself
You always act like you're somebody else"
"I never knew how much you meant to me
Never knew what you could do for me"
"I should've known better than to tell a lie
That doesn't mean you should say goodbye"
"I hope you know, how I feel about you
I love you girl, and I wish you knew"
BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH A
BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH A
YADDA YADDA YADDA B
DINGLE PRINGLE CAN'T U C
10!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
on Platform by Exiled_humanity
4 Jun 2003, 4:38 PM
I think this could be quite a good poeme if you made it better.
"It’s patched and dented", "It's frozen claws": Its
"With in" (both times): Within
"Chilling my frightened blood/Even more": Show, don't tell.
"It’s patched and dented", "It's frozen claws": Its
"With in" (both times): Within
"Chilling my frightened blood/Even more": Show, don't tell.
1. Recycle my cans
2. Find another paper-route
3. Have an abortion
4. Buy some toast