on hate by ts
16 Nov 2002, 12:08 PM
You might consider replacing 'hate' with 'h8'
on some deleted poem
16 Nov 2002, 5:48 PM
'sore' should be 'soar'. Actually, it should be blank, since this poeme is an unmitigated train wreck. A gushing love poeme about some dead guy you know nothing about is the worst kind. What is your point? Do you think you are somehow thwarting people's expectations, or contradicting their beliefs, about Tupac Shakur? You are not. This truly is the most awful thing ever. Perhaps once you've learned to stop worshipping corpses you'll be able to write proper poemes. Probably not, though, since you're obviously an idiot of the First Class.
Apart from anything else, do you really think Tupac Shakur would have wanted people to spend their lives writing overblown, misinformed rhyming eulogies about him. I doubt it.
Also, what the fuck do you mean by "he'll always be there in your face to make you laugh and flaunt"? Why would he make you flaunt? How? What is it that you would be flaunting? Perhaps you meant 'gallivant'. Indeede, I suggest you change all verbs in this poeme to the verb to gallivant, and then we shall see.
Apart from anything else, do you really think Tupac Shakur would have wanted people to spend their lives writing overblown, misinformed rhyming eulogies about him. I doubt it.
Also, what the fuck do you mean by "he'll always be there in your face to make you laugh and flaunt"? Why would he make you flaunt? How? What is it that you would be flaunting? Perhaps you meant 'gallivant'. Indeede, I suggest you change all verbs in this poeme to the verb to gallivant, and then we shall see.
on Heart of the killer by UAFANTHORPEY
17 Nov 2002, 12:47 PM
Is this about the reformation of Michael Meyers?
on His Mother's Son by vulcan
20 Nov 2002, 5:33 AM
shattered, atrocious, erotic, defenceless, dangling, bare, savage, chaotic, gay, harrowing, physical, famous, desperate, too, many, fucking, adjectives, asswipe.
on some deleted poem
20 Nov 2002, 5:47 AM
name: FantasticFreddy
favorite band: nirvana
favorite album: bleach
hobbies/interests: hangin' with friends, being cool and having a life, chilling out, pretending to be deep and depressed, partying with friends, having loads of friends, indiscriminately socialising with as many top-notch dullards as possible, model train sets.
favorite band: nirvana
favorite album: bleach
hobbies/interests: hangin' with friends, being cool and having a life, chilling out, pretending to be deep and depressed, partying with friends, having loads of friends, indiscriminately socialising with as many top-notch dullards as possible, model train sets.
on Where Is Happiness by BUFFY0BSESSED
20 Nov 2002, 5:53 AM
Happiness is a cigar called Jesus Christ.
on jane by roses are read
20 Nov 2002, 11:47 AM
You like to watch, don't you?
on The Trail by ThoughtfulSoul
20 Nov 2002, 11:52 AM
What a terrifying twist. Who would have thought your salvation would turn out to be your downfall? NOT ME THAT'S FOR SURE!!!11
on some deleted poem
20 Nov 2002, 11:58 AM
I often have difficulty balancing work with my busy social life.
on Now I Know by BUFFY0BSESSED
20 Nov 2002, 12:22 PM
Happiness is the look on a butler's face when he secretly dresses up in his Master's clothes.
on some deleted poem
20 Nov 2002, 1:21 PM
Yes. Yes, that is how the world is, isn't it?!
on Days of November When It Never Get Light by Nicholas Jones
20 Nov 2002, 1:22 PM
Think. Feel.
Explore.
Explore.
on some deleted poem
20 Nov 2002, 5:20 PM
Tell me more about this "soft, pappy mouth".
on Tommorows future by Sugarbbybuttrfly
20 Nov 2002, 5:20 PM
I hope you fall over and injure your beak.
on some deleted poem
20 Nov 2002, 7:16 PM
THIS IS CRAP.
THANKS FOR PLAYING.
THANKS FOR PLAYING.
on en el tiempo que era nina by daniella
20 Nov 2002, 7:17 PM
on The Considerate Lover by Tascobar
21 Nov 2002, 10:03 AM
Quite good.