Comments by-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I., 1541–1560 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

Got any more whacked up drug anecdotes you'd care to share with us, Mr Joe-joe?
The raw emotion that forms the very core of this poem is one of the most beautiful things I have ever experienced. 10.
on religion by ThePariahDog 28 Sep 2003, 8:43 AM
Read Soderstrom's new poem (Theology)----it's great!
replying on The fetus farm by horus8 27 Sep 2003, 12:55 AM
"A resplendent love of a young army captain for a beautiful and proud Gypsy kindles raging, terrifying flames of passion."
replying on The fetus farm by horus8 26 Sep 2003, 12:05 AM
I never accept a cigar from a latchkey slam jew.
replying on The fetus farm by horus8 25 Sep 2003, 11:37 PM
Yeah? Well, yesterday I threw up a fetus and gave it the Heimlich maneuver until it threw up its absorbed twin.
on Lonely by the_unknown_angel83 25 Sep 2003, 8:18 PM
Yes, I think it is your looks. But you're a lovely lass otherwise.
on The fetus farm by horus8 25 Sep 2003, 7:02 PM
I once lived on a foetus farm, you know. Ghastly work, especially in monsoon season. The fields were often utterly awash with unformed hearts and amniotic sacs. Of course we made do with what we had, and in fact it was my uncle who invented cheese & amnion flavoured crisps and sold the formula to Walkers (who renamed it at once). This poeme is rubbish though.
on ME AGAIN by oldschool 25 Sep 2003, 3:43 PM
Looking at a shrunken gland surpasses reading this.
on The Light by the_unknown_angel83 25 Sep 2003, 3:38 PM
[_] AABB rhyming scheme
[_] About drugs
[_] About romantic love
[_] About writing
[_] About suicide or self-mutilation
[_] About the author's social pastimes
[X] Arbitrary indentation
[X] Arbitrary line breaks
[_] Autobiographical but written in the third person
[X] Clerical errors
[_] Clichéd imagery (gazing out of window, tears falling like rain)
[_] Clichéd rhymes (love/above, heart/apart)
[_] Clichéd angst words (putrid, wretched)
[X] Devoid of rhyme
[X] Devoid of other linguistic embellishments (alliteration, onomatopoeia)
[X] Devoid of other literary devices (simile, synaesthesia)
[X] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery
[X] Ellipses used overabundantly
[_] Insipidly whimsical or zany
[_] Internet shorthand or emoticons
[_] Leaving rant
[_] Lower case only
[_] 'Lyrics'
[_] Melodramatic
[X] Naively religious or superstitious
[_] Obsessed with femininity
[X] Pointedly unanswered questions
[_] Rage against the machine
[X] Repetition of a word or phrase to the point of nausea
[_] Sanctimonious
[X] Self-obsessed
[_] Sentimental
[_] Smugly-named protagonist
[_] Thesaurophilia
[_] Untitled
[_] Vicarious wish fulfilment

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replying on Leaving by Pervy Elf 25 Sep 2003, 12:18 PM
Wow, you must have so much burning rage and pure beautiful energy if you couldn't post without holding something back. It's obvious that the only thing you're holding back is a silly temper tantrum about your parents/boyfriend/best friend "betraying" you, so while you aren't going to offend anyone by posting it here, you'll just upset yourself in the long run when nobody fucking likes it. Thanks!

Your friend,
doug
on Wha you funkin wan? by ==Doylum 25 Sep 2003, 12:07 PM
Quality
replying on Little Girl by Pervy Elf 25 Sep 2003, 12:07 PM
When are you going to write some more child abuse poemes?
on Your Inner Ear by razorgrin 25 Sep 2003, 12:06 PM
There should be more vestibular sacs in the human body. Frantically sellotaping on ever newer harvests of Bowman's Capsules simply isn't working anymore.
on Little Girl by Pervy Elf 25 Sep 2003, 7:53 AM
[_] AABB rhyming scheme
[_] About drugs
[X] About romantic love
[_] About writing
[X] About suicide or self-mutilation
[_] About the author's social pastimes
[_] Arbitrary indentation
[X] Arbitrary line breaks
[X] Autobiographical but written in the third person
[_] Clerical errors
[_] Clichéd imagery (gazing out of window, tears falling like rain)
[_] Clichéd rhymes (love/above, heart/apart)
[X] Clichéd angst words (putrid, wretched)
[X] Devoid of rhyme
[X] Devoid of other linguistic embellishments (alliteration, onomatopoeia)
[X] Devoid of other literary devices (simile, synaesthesia)
[X] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery
[_] Ellipses used overabundantly
[_] Insipidly whimsical or zany
[_] Internet shorthand or emoticons
[_] Leaving rant
[_] Lower case only
[_] 'Lyrics'
[X] Melodramatic
[_] Naively religious or superstitious
[_] Obsessed with femininity
[_] Pointedly unanswered questions
[_] Rage against the machine
[_] Repetition of a word or phrase to the point of nausea
[_] Sanctimonious
[X] Self-obsessed
[_] Sentimental
[_] Smugly-named protagonist
[_] Thesaurophilia
[_] Untitled
[_] Vicarious wish fulfilment
replying on Brighton Beach by Caducus 24 Sep 2003, 10:40 AM
Today's Headlines:

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THOUSANDS SCOFFED IN PRESCOTT HUNGER-STRIKE CALAMITY

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replying on Untitled (A Dark Angel Litmus) by Geschäftsreise 23 Sep 2003, 6:08 PM
Oh yes. I'd forgotten why they were called 'eye rhymes'. Why not just call them pseudorhymes?
replying on Untitled (A Dark Angel Litmus) by Geschäftsreise 23 Sep 2003, 5:12 PM
'Eye rhyme'
replying on The Nude by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 23 Sep 2003, 5:08 PM
Jesus died for you.
on My Friend Burgers by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 23 Sep 2003, 1:20 AM
This is the best poeme about Burgers that could possibly be written. 10.