on a bit of theory by pete
24 Jan 2010, 9:03 PM
Léon Theremin
on certain things... by nypoet22
24 Jan 2010, 9:01 PM
No doubt.
on End of day poem by ecargo
24 Jan 2010, 8:59 PM
pewter sky
:)
:)
on My Thoughts by amanda_dcosta
24 Jan 2010, 8:55 PM
Do you choose to breath?
on Farewell, Kind Lover by Dovina
24 Jan 2010, 8:53 PM
Can you please fix this a bit for me. Just add some "a"s. I love it.
on With Old Light by Ranger
24 Jan 2010, 8:51 PM
Not bad for a brit.
on untitle by daggatolar
22 Jan 2010, 11:45 PM
and hot me?
on Withering Blithering Blathering Wavering by T. Jonathron Remp
22 Jan 2010, 11:41 PM
I liked the first few lines because I could keep the beat.
That must have been all you had going, because once I lost the beat, I hated it.
That must have been all you had going, because once I lost the beat, I hated it.
on Reunification, the Pong by http://mulberryfairy
22 Jan 2010, 11:37 PM
Nice imagery....but forced. It doesn't feel natural.
on Mother Mayday is Here to Stay (Stay Away!) by T. Jonathron Remp
22 Jan 2010, 11:32 PM
not poetry. Somewhat intelligent angst.
replying on Gadgets and Poems by Dovina
14 Sep 2008, 9:28 PM
on enter, do. let up, let loose. by FreeFormFixation
7 Sep 2008, 1:09 AM
Hard to follow possibly because of the indentation. I like a lot of the phrases, but I can't follow because of punctuation and spacing.
on Gadgets and Poems by Dovina
7 Sep 2008, 12:53 AM
I have a hard time reading "paragraph" poetry. Take out 50 words, and split it up into somewhat rhythmic lines.
on Are your eyes by hobojo
7 Sep 2008, 12:49 AM
As lyrics, 7. As stand-alone poem 5.
on 5 minute poem: section by Bill Z Bub
7 Sep 2008, 12:44 AM
I like the second verse alot, but the first is worthless. Make a connection.
on SWF seeks SWM by Bethy
7 Sep 2008, 12:33 AM
Great poem! I love the rhythm. I remember the poem about your legs. One of my favorites! This captures the same feeling.
on Time to Leap* edited by hobojo
7 Sep 2008, 12:24 AM
I personally like poems that give less details. Let the reader make his/her own conclusion. Give them a feeling, not how you are feeling. Lead them to the conclusion through visual messages.
ok...It was just a simple point in time type thing, but I see where you are going.
What type of payoff do you generally look for in a poem?
I guess I was only trying to convey a feeling. Nothing more. I see that it could seem "incomplete" for some people.
I'll see if I can expand on it.
Have you submitted anything recently? This site needs some tlc from poem makers.