on Are your eyes by hobojo
7 Sep 2008, 12:49 AM
As lyrics, 7. As stand-alone poem 5.
on Gadgets and Poems by Dovina
7 Sep 2008, 12:53 AM
I have a hard time reading "paragraph" poetry. Take out 50 words, and split it up into somewhat rhythmic lines.
on enter, do. let up, let loose. by FreeFormFixation
7 Sep 2008, 1:09 AM
Hard to follow possibly because of the indentation. I like a lot of the phrases, but I can't follow because of punctuation and spacing.
on Time to Leap* edited by hobojo
7 Sep 2008, 12:24 AM
I personally like poems that give less details. Let the reader make his/her own conclusion. Give them a feeling, not how you are feeling. Lead them to the conclusion through visual messages.
on some deleted poem
7 Sep 2008, 1:02 AM
Random words do not necessarily make good poetry. What does "Zombie makers came with cliches and syringes" mean exactly?!?
No explanation you can give will correct this poor form.
Sorry.
No explanation you can give will correct this poor form.
Sorry.
on 5 minute poem: section by Bill Z Bub
7 Sep 2008, 12:44 AM
I like the second verse alot, but the first is worthless. Make a connection.
on SWF seeks SWM by Bethy
7 Sep 2008, 12:33 AM
Great poem! I love the rhythm. I remember the poem about your legs. One of my favorites! This captures the same feeling.
on Mother Mayday is Here to Stay (Stay Away!) by T. Jonathron Remp
22 Jan 2010, 11:32 PM
not poetry. Somewhat intelligent angst.
on Reunification, the Pong by http://mulberryfairy
22 Jan 2010, 11:37 PM
Nice imagery....but forced. It doesn't feel natural.
on Withering Blithering Blathering Wavering by T. Jonathron Remp
22 Jan 2010, 11:41 PM
I liked the first few lines because I could keep the beat.
That must have been all you had going, because once I lost the beat, I hated it.
That must have been all you had going, because once I lost the beat, I hated it.
on untitle by daggatolar
22 Jan 2010, 11:45 PM
and hot me?
on With Old Light by Ranger
24 Jan 2010, 8:51 PM
Not bad for a brit.
on Farewell, Kind Lover by Dovina
24 Jan 2010, 8:53 PM
Can you please fix this a bit for me. Just add some "a"s. I love it.
on My Thoughts by amanda_dcosta
24 Jan 2010, 8:55 PM
Do you choose to breath?
on End of day poem by ecargo
24 Jan 2010, 8:59 PM
pewter sky
:)
:)
on certain things... by nypoet22
24 Jan 2010, 9:01 PM
No doubt.
on a bit of theory by pete
24 Jan 2010, 9:03 PM
Léon Theremin
on February by half.italian
1 Feb 2010, 10:03 PM
Thanks for responding. :)
ok...It was just a simple point in time type thing, but I see where you are going.
What type of payoff do you generally look for in a poem?
I guess I was only trying to convey a feeling. Nothing more. I see that it could seem "incomplete" for some people.
I'll see if I can expand on it.
Have you submitted anything recently? This site needs some tlc from poem makers.
ok...It was just a simple point in time type thing, but I see where you are going.
What type of payoff do you generally look for in a poem?
I guess I was only trying to convey a feeling. Nothing more. I see that it could seem "incomplete" for some people.
I'll see if I can expand on it.
Have you submitted anything recently? This site needs some tlc from poem makers.