replying on Cherry Blossoms (anti-haiku) by middenHeap
12 Jan 2004, 3:51 AM
don't forget that he somehow managed to get a mess-o-adults griped at him too. which, of course, speaks poorly about the adults. ha!
on A dream of a fruit-gun by zodiac
11 Jan 2004, 6:52 PM
Get the hell outta here Zodiac! No. Nevermind. I'll show myself the door. Thank you.
replying on Mermaid by lastobelus
11 Jan 2004, 2:54 PM
I suspected. I need to fire my muse. or myself. I'm not sure which.
on Cherry Blossoms (anti-haiku) by middenHeap
11 Jan 2004, 2:49 PM
This is not your average sunday night on the 'ranker.
on Mermaid by lastobelus
11 Jan 2004, 2:48 PM
People like you and middenHeap show up, and I feel flat out stepped on. *races toward liquor cabinet*
on A dream of a fruit-gun by zodiac
11 Jan 2004, 2:36 PM
I wrote about a train.
on Da Ghetto by <{Baba^Yaga}>
11 Jan 2004, 12:09 PM
Yes. I feel better already.
on A feast for a king by fair12
11 Jan 2004, 7:23 AM
"crying their history in the orbs of my eyes" Orbs bugs me. It's like saying the eyes of my eyes. Easy fix.
replying on Malaysia by Crakyamuni
11 Jan 2004, 7:18 AM
You're scaring me Horus. Stop, or at least slow the mellowing process, please. Be a doll?
on Malaysia by Crakyamuni
11 Jan 2004, 7:16 AM
The only thing I'd change is belly button. too silly for a serious piece. And generally speaking, hacks have no idea what assonance and alliteration are. Now tuck, Nip.
on I smell coffee by Princess_Snowflake
10 Jan 2004, 8:00 AM
on Dance in my Golden Shower by SupremeDreamer
8 Jan 2004, 12:50 PM
Other countries wallow in their own pee because they have no "indoor plumbing". Still others, who have "proper receptacles", bathe in pee for entertainment purposes. No irony there, ha!
on Sonnet Eighteen by devilishnutcase
7 Jan 2004, 8:32 PM
4 for the comments 2 for the psuedo-sonnet.
on Waiting to inhale (Stardust & God's Black Nostril) by Don-Quixote
7 Jan 2004, 8:24 PM
no. soldered sushi.
replying on Waiting to inhale (Stardust & God's Black Nostril) by Don-Quixote
7 Jan 2004, 8:22 PM
something something ashes might be a good replacement. andante is an excellent call.
on Waiting to inhale (Stardust & God's Black Nostril) by Don-Quixote
7 Jan 2004, 8:10 PM
First of all, I know very little about drugs, how to "do" them and what the factors are involving such. So some of this poem loses me. But that's my lack of knowledge, not your poem. Moldy crackers should go, I think. Disneys' Aladdin popped into my head. Assuming (andante) is referring to winter, I love it. Had to look up the word though. I love the fleas, wool plaugue, and scarlet clouds. Over all I think it's fine as it sits. neener neener neener.