replying on bad boy taylor by rosiebailey
4 Nov 2002, 11:48 AM
Be careful U M, don't wanna tug on supermans cape, right?
replying on Three pointed star by INTRANSIT
4 Nov 2002, 11:40 AM
Ok all, I was hauling Mercedes (Three pointed star logo) out of Baltimore MD when the absurdity of a car ,with more gadgets than a 747, jammed this haiku into my stomach. It's manufactured in Germany,(any one remember the holocaust?). It comes standard with an SOS button, which when pushed alerts local authorities, fire ,rescue, or whatever you need. I.E., saves lives. I almost didn't take the load just because of the cost of these damn things. But, hypocrite I am said, "you gotta eat too".
Ant to whomever pointed out the last line has 6 syllables:" Drats! I thought I had it nailed" Spelled "thousand" wrong too. shit.
Ant to whomever pointed out the last line has 6 syllables:" Drats! I thought I had it nailed" Spelled "thousand" wrong too. shit.
on Slept by Nicholas Jones
2 Nov 2002, 3:59 PM
Painfully true. You are quite the writer Mr. Jones. Another for me to look up to, thank you.
on In the Quiet of the Night a Tree Gently Shakes by Nicholas Jones
30 Oct 2002, 5:44 AM
Now THAT'S a Haiku! I'd like to see more of these, please.
replying on Hve you ever..... v2 by INTRANSIT
29 Oct 2002, 12:49 PM
Au naturel is best! This needs, shortening, maybe? too much stuff is a little overwhelming,yes>?
replying on Hve you ever..... v2 by INTRANSIT
29 Oct 2002, 12:33 PM
Kinkos would be cheap compared to this animal. Actually, I was going for the small personal battles that seem like big ones at the time, transitioning over to the... actually I think I see what you are saying. I kind of feel like I'm putting dollars in your g-string right now, ha ha.
True. But I need to see what frightens you because I need to learn how to be careful with my words, I may write a piece that nobody likes that is truly innocent because I chose the wrong phrasing. No, I'm not trying to write for everyone. Thats improbable. But 50\50 makes me quite happy.
replying on Hve you ever..... v2 by INTRANSIT
29 Oct 2002, 12:19 PM
Yes. And these stupid t\s computers are waylaying my pocketbook something fierce. Poemranker has become an addiction to me. Albeit a healthy one.
replying on Worth the wait by INTRANSIT
29 Oct 2002, 12:08 PM
This is interesting, the piece I posted first, I thought to be the better piece. This one's getting all the attention. Hmmmm.
replying on Worth the wait by INTRANSIT
29 Oct 2002, 12:06 PM
And how are you today, -=Dark_Angel=-?
replying on Worth the wait by INTRANSIT
29 Oct 2002, 12:04 PM
Your last piece hits close to how it feels to live in a truck for long periods of time.
on The Black Hearted Sunflower by anitawit
29 Oct 2002, 2:38 AM
Not quite a haiku but excellent content.
on In the Valley of Two-Dollar Pints of Red Hook IPA by <~>
29 Oct 2002, 2:30 AM
Dittos on the last three comments. Fun and true.
on advice for the heated by <~>
29 Oct 2002, 2:26 AM
Yes,defrost. I like to watch;)
replying on Mystery on the Bridge by vulcan
27 Oct 2002, 6:30 AM
If you can fit Walt Whitman in your flat, you will have a bridge.
on Mystery on the Bridge by vulcan
27 Oct 2002, 6:28 AM
I like the rework, I can see the picture better now. Might've been me the first time. Anyway, this is beautiful and sad.good read.8
on dream dream dream dream dream by nentwined
25 Oct 2002, 4:25 PM
Yess, and this is really good my friend.
on Shadow's First Attempt at Haiku by loneshadow29
25 Oct 2002, 4:23 PM
You gotta let go of that negative energy sometime ,dude. Nice haiku though