on Death is a Three Step Process by dancin_n_da_moonlite
16 Mar 2005, 8:19 AM
Good work on an easy form made difficult (and better}.
on The Glass by dancin_n_da_moonlite
16 Mar 2005, 8:16 AM
We all see the world through glass. I see it through the glass of a wine bottle. Sometimes I see the world through the glass of the Cathode Ray Tube. Glass is(at least)obvious where our own prejudices and cultural filters are not.
on JJâs Church by Dovina
16 Mar 2005, 8:10 AM
I'll never go to another steakhouse bar and feel secular again. JJ's Steakhouse Church is a holey (sic) place
on eat what you want. by burgerking33
9 Mar 2005, 5:02 AM
Nice, tight, little rant. Good diet, too. If you shove all that stuff up your... It never gets into your blood stream to clog your arteries.
replying on Advertising says: by Dovina
2 Mar 2005, 11:37 AM
You forget (Curry+toothache+beer)/2 in your equation-- but you're right anyway. Perhaps curry = 0.
on Advertising says: by Dovina
2 Mar 2005, 8:44 AM
You are at your best when you do the math. The feeling I get from this poem is âEnnui and TV.â
on Summing Up by Dovina
20 Feb 2005, 10:05 PM
Nicely put.
on Piercings by PsydewaysTears
16 Feb 2005, 12:27 AM
I liked the concept and the twist at the end.
Some rhymes could have been a bit "weirder" in keeping with the subject, for example:
Some people pierce "down under"
below the waist; above the knees.
Wait a minute! Does that make it sound like an Australian piercing?
Your poem works for me. -9-
Some rhymes could have been a bit "weirder" in keeping with the subject, for example:
Some people pierce "down under"
below the waist; above the knees.
Wait a minute! Does that make it sound like an Australian piercing?
Your poem works for me. -9-
on Pillow Talk by horus8
16 Feb 2005, 12:18 AM
May I count to 100 by -10-'s?
on Insanity by Lifeboatman
16 Feb 2005, 12:14 AM
As a man trapped in a woman's body, I must confess that you are right. -10-
on The Man I Love by Dovina
16 Feb 2005, 12:10 AM
This poem is sweeter than Splenda.-10-
I really like this poem. It is very light-hearted with much sarcasm. I believe the last four lines would be better re-arranged as follows:
"but Iâm better off girly
than a poetess, surely
this poem of mine
doesn't seem to rhyme"
It puts the heavy-handed "girly conclusion" inside the poem and makes the end a "typically girly" comment(in the sacastic sense in which you write about the subject of girliness).
"but Iâm better off girly
than a poetess, surely
this poem of mine
doesn't seem to rhyme"
It puts the heavy-handed "girly conclusion" inside the poem and makes the end a "typically girly" comment(in the sacastic sense in which you write about the subject of girliness).
on "I" became "We" by *.*ReAdY To SnAp.*.
26 Jan 2005, 7:38 AM
Never give up.
God's got sumpthang, etc. -8-
God's got sumpthang, etc. -8-
replying on Memphis Skyline by wilco
26 Jan 2005, 7:35 AM
I remember ordering dinner at a Ponderosa Steakhouse in Dallas. The waitress stopped me in mid-sentence to tell me, "Y'all sure do talk funny." I guess it goes both ways. Sorry to mention that "Y'all sure do talk funny."
on Memphis Skyline by wilco
25 Jan 2005, 7:48 PM
Good lyric. The line "sitting on the banks" makes me wonder if it should be "sitting on the bank." I don't know if Memphis has several rivers with banks upon which to sit or a river with one bank and another on the other side. Still, I like it-9-.
replying on Feudal Conflict by Dovina
25 Jan 2005, 7:35 PM
Good info. But when my cousin, Gaston, taught me to play chess 50 years ago, he Told me it was the Persians (Sinbad the Sailor people) who invented chess. Of course, he was the one who told me that there was a kid-eating monster living in the hall closet (close to the restroom)that ate children when they wandered out of their room at night. Needless to say, I got very good at holding my water 'til morning (most of the time).
replying on Feudal Conflict by Dovina
25 Jan 2005, 3:28 PM
D, did you mean maybe odor or maybly older? Chess is much odr than the Geeks. I always thought it was an Arabic or Persian game.