on Plurals by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
19 Feb 2007, 1:16 AM
The plural of "terrible poeme" is "www.allpoetry.com"
on A Night out With Chaucer by cleverdevice
19 Feb 2007, 1:19 AM
I have finally worked out where you stole this little beauty from. Leave the Bailey classics alone, you thieving cad! -bow'ls-
on Yet more woe by Stephen Robins
16 Feb 2007, 3:12 PM
Have you seen Otis Lee Crenshaw (Rich Hall) do his prison rape song?
on some deleted poem
3 Mar 2007, 8:28 AM
My life in jeopardy
Mudered in cold blood, that's what I'm gonna be
I ain't been home since Friday night and now my wife
is coming after me...
Mudered in cold blood, that's what I'm gonna be
I ain't been home since Friday night and now my wife
is coming after me...
on A Single Strand of Golden Yellow by Aetius
3 Mar 2007, 8:29 AM
This is the level of mediocrity to which the majority of us aspire.
on some deleted poem
3 Mar 2007, 8:31 AM
Good stuff
on some deleted poem
3 Mar 2007, 8:35 AM
Good metre, but stanza two is grammatically...well, ambiguous at best.
on Quantum Reality by Quarton
8 Mar 2007, 1:36 AM
Interesting read - in a few places it sounds more science textbook-y than poetic ('ever increasing complexity' etc.) I liked stanza 5 and its cosmic dance - perhaps a reference to Holst's Planets Suite would have been appropriate there?
It's certainly a piece with some education behind it - I like that, but my failing is a short attention span. Maybe cutting it into two or three sections would make it easier for simpletons like myself to read in one sitting?
Good poem though.
It's certainly a piece with some education behind it - I like that, but my failing is a short attention span. Maybe cutting it into two or three sections would make it easier for simpletons like myself to read in one sitting?
Good poem though.
on A whole load of cunts by mr cunt
8 Mar 2007, 1:43 AM
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA! You are hilarious!
Those were ip addresses from my college system.
-10- for making me cry with laughter.
Those were ip addresses from my college system.
-10- for making me cry with laughter.
on some deleted poem
8 Mar 2007, 2:03 AM
"So you took him to bed and when he wanted sex you stormed out in a moral huff?"
Besides, I was that diner and I did not appreciate it when a stranger went in me. I may have stood up, but I'd rather not have my stool pushed in.
Besides, I was that diner and I did not appreciate it when a stranger went in me. I may have stood up, but I'd rather not have my stool pushed in.
on Dancing for dinner by fevriere
8 Mar 2007, 2:04 AM
Top drawer stuff.
on A Wanderlust To The New by fevriere
8 Mar 2007, 2:16 AM
Aside from 'smally dance' this is so good. I don't know why people haven't read you more on here.
on Rock and Roll by wilco
8 Mar 2007, 2:19 AM
I'd like to hear this one, as I can't tell whether the rhyme of 'fury' and 'money' (and 'Mississippi') will be distracting or not.
on Ben Fogle by Stephen Robins
11 Mar 2007, 2:34 PM
I do hope you've been watching Crufts. He was particularly splendidly attired today.
on Hallelujah by hungry_shepherd
10 Mar 2007, 9:31 AM
You must know, surely, that any appreciator of Cohen (or, more likely, Buckley) will not be able to bring themself to accept this.
on The Landscape by Sasha
13 Mar 2007, 1:13 PM
I assume the translation is as good as it reads. The poeme's 50-50 on the ace/turd spectrum though.
on some deleted poem
13 Mar 2007, 1:20 PM
Legend
on Pedaling West by Dovina
13 Mar 2007, 1:19 PM
This is more like a diary entry in verses. I don't think there's anything wrong with that per se, but it needs to be delivered in either an interesting or easyflowing manner - I hate to say this but rhymes would do the trick here. It feels like you've gone for straight iambic meter but I think it needs more than that. Either that or some truly staggering imagery throughout.