on The Cat by blkarak
10 Dec 2002, 8:01 PM
excellent
on Check Yourself by INTRANSIT
10 Dec 2002, 5:59 PM
On second thought, make mine nine. This one still does it for me.
replying on missing time by Bill Z Bub
9 Dec 2002, 9:20 PM
And I've changed it again. This time: "as careful as the arrangement" to "like the careful arangement" and "somebody's cat" became "someone's cat"
and I changed morning to morn. But then it seemed out of place, so I changed it back to morning again. Thouroughly modern.
and I changed morning to morn. But then it seemed out of place, so I changed it back to morning again. Thouroughly modern.
I wasn't sure about that one, but I think you're right. Still, the word "untitled" is still a title. On this site, anyway. It's just a crappy, common title.
And it's been a while since I've seen a traditional haiku here.
Like I said, it has become a pet peeve of mine.
And it's been a while since I've seen a traditional haiku here.
Like I said, it has become a pet peeve of mine.
replying on route nine by Bill Z Bub
9 Dec 2002, 8:51 PM
I'm going to stay out of this one.
replying on She Puts The Fun In Funeral by David
9 Dec 2002, 6:22 PM
On the other hand, everyone else seems to love it, so what do I know?
replying on She Puts The Fun In Funeral by David
9 Dec 2002, 6:21 PM
I'm not sure. Not a moral. Maybe slight closure? It needs an ending.
replying on missing time by Bill Z Bub
9 Dec 2002, 11:37 AM
coming from you, this is high praise indeed. now i really AM blushing!
But i still want to say "morn" instead of "morning". It just sounds better to my ear... Hrmm...
But i still want to say "morn" instead of "morning". It just sounds better to my ear... Hrmm...
on Missing the In-Between by <~>
9 Dec 2002, 11:24 AM
hearty.
replying on triple suicide server line by Bill Z Bub
9 Dec 2002, 11:22 AM
...and i thank you. I wasn't sure about this one...
on How the Mighty Fall by jdsnyd
9 Dec 2002, 11:20 AM
Despite your high-falutin' words, I like it. Yup. I read it aloud and it sounds good to me. Or do I just love my own voice? Who knows.
So olympian, I admire. Now I go back to the cthonic.
So olympian, I admire. Now I go back to the cthonic.
on Panning for gold by INTRANSIT
9 Dec 2002, 10:58 AM
Cool.
on She Puts The Fun In Funeral by David
7 Dec 2002, 11:15 PM
I like it, but it feels unfinished.
replying on route nine by Bill Z Bub
7 Dec 2002, 10:53 PM
Outwardly I may be humble, but deep inside I'm awash with arrogance. As all writers must be?
replying on missing time by Bill Z Bub
7 Dec 2002, 10:44 PM
Aw shucks, y'all are makin me blush.
replying on missing time by Bill Z Bub
7 Dec 2002, 8:19 AM
Thanks very much for the comments.
It's so hard to get rid of some words,
they are children in the brambles
with scratches and dirt
but beloved none the less.
I shall be merciless.
BTW you rock.
It's so hard to get rid of some words,
they are children in the brambles
with scratches and dirt
but beloved none the less.
I shall be merciless.
BTW you rock.
replying on missing time by Bill Z Bub
7 Dec 2002, 8:16 AM
Okay, I'm going to take all the advice. Feel free to vote again!
Read me,
Love me,
Rank me.
So selfish
Read me,
Love me,
Rank me.
So selfish
on The Poem, The Explanation, The Goodbye by Piano
7 Dec 2002, 8:06 AM
Wow.