on Goddess of the vineyard by INTRANSIT
11 Jun 2003, 3:43 PM
LAst 2 lines of S1 just fuck it up, other than that I really absorbed myself in to this so I ask you from the bottom of my tiny black heart, change it. 7
on Hollow and Alone by willknots_chick
18 Jun 2003, 6:32 AM
i'm flabbergasted as to how this got a 10. Its one of a hundred toffees in the same foil wrapper. Its not crap but its at best a 5
on Thorns by poetandknowit
17 Jun 2003, 9:36 AM
Thought this was brilliant, I love line 2 its original. Your an interesting character I either love your stuff or hate it and you've said a couple of negative things about me in the past but fuck it we don't have to like each other.
I feel I am improving as a writer, more experimental and I believe you must selectively read the good and ignore the bad and let it inspire you.
What about you ?
By the way my brother's gone AWOL last I heard he was state side.
Great poem - seriously.
a rare 10
I feel I am improving as a writer, more experimental and I believe you must selectively read the good and ignore the bad and let it inspire you.
What about you ?
By the way my brother's gone AWOL last I heard he was state side.
Great poem - seriously.
a rare 10
on Jackanapes and smoke buttons by Bachus
11 Jun 2003, 3:42 PM
I love these outbursts of yours there so fucking apt.8
on Jeremi B. Handrinos: Part 2 by wCUNTw
5 Jun 2003, 8:10 AM
Yes I read the barrage of comments on the crap poem you and I berated. Then little dutch boys finger fell off in the dam and a deluge of insults came yours and Shardiks way. her poem (her name fails to register) was masqueraded in a lamentful excuse of 'its about my friend having SIDS (Severe Incompetent Dickhead Syndrome) I cant write a good poem so I'll come out with talons and spit shit. I get it man.
Your poems not as important as its retailiatory message and i quote from wisdom words of val kilmers voiceover for Elvis in 'True Romance' ---
I like you man, always have always will
8 turkeys shot.
Your poems not as important as its retailiatory message and i quote from wisdom words of val kilmers voiceover for Elvis in 'True Romance' ---
I like you man, always have always will
8 turkeys shot.
on A Moment In Nowhere by Mr Pig
5 Jun 2003, 8:03 AM
Sublime, a wonderful poem and thats all I can say and all I'm gonna say.
Your a show off, a scoundrel, and a german sausage eating Lord of a sprawling property.
Your a show off, a scoundrel, and a german sausage eating Lord of a sprawling property.
on Carpet threading the sky by INTRANSIT
5 Jun 2003, 8:05 AM
09
and yes eschelons fits like a milliners hat. Well done its a daisy.
and yes eschelons fits like a milliners hat. Well done its a daisy.
on Hunting God by Shardik
4 Jun 2003, 9:19 AM
Dont shoot picasso the sound of the gun would screw his other ear up. This has a cult quality to it. Needless to say I diggit 8
on "Your shrimp cocktail", wide ass. by Bachus
4 Jun 2003, 9:24 AM
I'm not in the prawn(e) posse but i line 3 is to die 9 lives for.
For making me snigger 8 (I refuse to laugh its far too wanky)
For making me snigger 8 (I refuse to laugh its far too wanky)
on "Your shrimp cocktail", wide ass. by Bachus
4 Jun 2003, 9:26 AM
Ahh and line 2, yes I recall a japanese waiter in a sushi bar with 3 fingers 'making love to my fish' too, he made so much more effort than the others.
Hmm yes I feel a 'fortune cookie moment' coming on.
Hmm yes I feel a 'fortune cookie moment' coming on.
on Where I Stand by Katie
4 Jun 2003, 9:27 AM
Where do you like to stand Katie?
And where do you most like to sit?
Answer these 2 questions and I will marry my pit bull in white dress.
And where do you most like to sit?
Answer these 2 questions and I will marry my pit bull in white dress.
on A Summers Day In Stolen Eden by Mr Pig
27 May 2003, 3:45 PM
Obi Wan has taught you well.
Join the dark side (ooooopppppaaaar)
Your still my muse this is so rich in detail
Join the dark side (ooooopppppaaaar)
Your still my muse this is so rich in detail
on some deleted poem
20 May 2003, 11:35 AM
Awesome, and you know it 9
on may 18 by Bill Z Bub
20 May 2003, 11:36 AM
I remember reading your poems a long time ago and though they were inspiring you REALLY are the cat in silk pajamas now. I'll keep this real: this rocks
on Symbol Of Love by simone_girard
20 May 2003, 11:39 AM
Listen man, stop reading Barb Cartland get out into the MAtrix and spread your virus elsewhere this is as bad as a blow job from 10 years of marriage.
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on The Order Of Things by Mr Pig
20 May 2003, 11:42 AM
What can I say huh? this is what you do best and its a silky read your a true maestro at this stuff, fuck the haiku stick to freeform this is where your awesome. Aint Cathy a bitch ?
on Down Lovers Lane by Mr Pig
9 Apr 2003, 2:07 AM
very nice bud, however not as inspirational as the blooding, but still as a concept piece, pretty damn fuckin fine.
on Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig
10 Apr 2003, 7:52 AM
Why did you delete my other comment? Anyway only you could have but in my hotel room i found this and thought hmmm I wonder why you posted such a personal poem. I like it a lot because I know you can belt out some real gold and this you have chosen to be frank and honest.
Take care amigo.
Take care amigo.
on some deleted poem
2 Apr 2003, 8:47 AM
GOD I'M TOO HARD ON MYSELF ARNE'T I GW?
#NO I'M JUST HARD SORRY MY BOOB!
#NO I'M JUST HARD SORRY MY BOOB!