on Chickens by rnuk
9 Aug 2006, 8:11 AM
Brilliant, simple and to the point. The ending is classic. Now I know about Marxism. Thanks.
on Bobjim, Jimbob by Spider-Man
9 Aug 2006, 12:45 AM
I usually like disgusting humorous shit , but this one made me a little sick to my stomach, maybe that's the point.
replying on My First Hangover by mindsigns
29 Mar 2006, 1:11 AM
Nick at night-ish, I agree, so how else would you want to write a poem about long urinal excretion, gin hangovers and diarrhea...in the style of James Joyce maybe??? Or maybe Nietzsche??
I think a 7th grade style fits perfectly with these "fart joke" type of lyrics. So i guess I'm taking your comments as a complimient, Thanks!
I think a 7th grade style fits perfectly with these "fart joke" type of lyrics. So i guess I'm taking your comments as a complimient, Thanks!
replying on Brethren, oblivion is not the road to the city Ataraxis II by SupremeDreamer
9 Mar 2006, 1:45 AM
There are a couple of original words of mine in there
replying on The King Of Loserville by mindsigns
9 Mar 2006, 1:43 AM
Been there, done that...the problem is eventually i have to come back
replying on The King Of Loserville by mindsigns
9 Mar 2006, 1:42 AM
3 was great, I could give or take 1 and 2, just start me off with 3 and plow right into the original trilogy
replying on Brethren, oblivion is not the road to the city Ataraxis II by SupremeDreamer
7 Mar 2006, 11:03 PM
I guess I didn't ferment, fester or merge myself clearly enough, I revel in my embarrassment. For my derision's and ineptness are fostering and ultimately I dread & eschew myself. If only I could be more inconsolable, ominous and pensive then maybe I can bow down to your wisdom. My bedeviled self can only ask for your gracious forgiveness & accession and help me let go of my past discordance.
replying on The King Of Loserville by mindsigns
7 Mar 2006, 10:33 PM
Unfortunately i wasn't trying to be cliche, it describes me to a tee , ( just replace Trek with Wars), everything else is pretty accurate. bummer
on Brethren, oblivion is not the road to the city Ataraxis II by SupremeDreamer
7 Mar 2006, 5:42 AM
Sounds like your preaching to me, I hate lectures.
And I don't fancy looking up every other word you write in the dictionary, I'm a simple man and big word don't impress me.
And I don't fancy looking up every other word you write in the dictionary, I'm a simple man and big word don't impress me.
on The Seagull Reader by SpiffyDoo
16 Mar 2004, 12:36 AM
I like it but it doesn't read like a poem, at least until the last stanza, it reads more like a paragraph -- maybe that was your point - i still thought it was good
on what i see with strings by New Life Drug
14 Mar 2004, 9:01 AM
It feels more like a run-on sentence than a poem, the images are too random=..some connect and some I just don't know...
on My Stigmata: "Psychotica" by SupremeDreamer
14 Mar 2004, 8:55 AM
i think i need to study this more, there's alot there
on dear jim d. by peaceseeker
14 Mar 2004, 8:47 AM
Too many quotation marks, me head hurts
replying on April Showers by mindsigns
19 Feb 2003, 5:49 AM
hey horus, there is more than one friggin kind of sonnet out there, they aren't all Shakespearian, though I did like yours. Mine wasn an attempt at creating my own style, you can say it sucks but don't say it failed
replying on April Showers by mindsigns
18 Feb 2003, 12:07 PM
Nicholas, if the poem was about the month of april I'd agree, seeing i just finished shoveling 25 inches a nice fresh snow from the drive way, and hey it's still cold and windy in April too- just to remind you