on Jellybean Land by JoyLuck
12 Jun 2003, 5:07 AM
How very hairy potter.
on some deleted poem
12 Jun 2003, 5:07 AM
Interesting....Just kidding.
on some deleted poem
12 Jun 2003, 5:17 AM
a bit longer than tradional haiku
on some deleted poem
11 Jun 2003, 4:17 PM
zen-like simplicity, but it could have a touch more imagery.
on Fate Sucks by Kitch
12 Jun 2003, 5:05 AM
tends to ramble.
on Empty by KatieKaBoom
12 Jun 2003, 5:14 AM
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on Drinker's Haikus 2a and 2b by cacophony
12 Jun 2003, 5:18 AM
isn't Olde English a leather treatment or furniture polish?
on One Night Stand by Audaciouslilgrl
13 Jun 2003, 9:00 AM
eliminate redundancy from title to last line. get rid of "farce" it sounds too much like fart. Otherwise, a poems go, it is ordinary. what can you do to make it more unique?
on some deleted poem
13 Jun 2003, 8:49 AM
I like it. I'm trying to remember where I've heard ass-hat before. I'm certain I have. Once my mom called my wife an ass-and-a-half. it was very difficult not to laugh.
on <Haiku> by Entelechist
12 Jun 2003, 5:14 AM
search for something more palpable and less ordinary.
on Grandma by waltfreakinwhitman
12 Jun 2003, 5:17 AM
give a whole now meaning to "deep impact"
on my cat by itchiwitch
12 Jun 2003, 5:19 AM
nicely done.
on Jackanapes and smoke buttons by Bachus
11 Jun 2003, 4:15 PM
Powerful and succinct. Nicely done. deserves a 10.
on moment in time by calilegzzz
11 Jun 2003, 4:20 PM
a few typos, trite and stolid. I'm sure it was nice for you at the time.
on Ga-go, Part two of that same play, the suspensefull climax. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
12 Jun 2003, 5:09 AM
I think you should've posted this to playranker.com instead.
on American haiku by horus8
12 Jun 2003, 5:19 AM
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on Hefty Smurf by Bachus
12 Jun 2003, 5:12 AM
another good smurf haiku, but the punctuation should go away.
on Goddess of the vineyard by INTRANSIT
11 Jun 2003, 4:22 PM
powerful. lovely. grapey.
on Worst Haiku Ever by maffy
12 Jun 2003, 5:13 AM
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Don't kill yourself.
That'd be stupid,
just too stupid
However, consider revisions that are more creative ways to kill yourself. be specific, like tying a plastic bag over your head and handcuffing yourself to a tree. They'll all think you were murdered. wouldn't that be fun?