replying on FHjk by Dark Angle
14 Jul 2007, 1:43 PM
Too bad it took five years to reply to the comment. Old indeed.
on Ferris Wheel by alverland theme park
30 Sep 2003, 7:22 AM
I like the simplicity.
That's fine. no need to be closed minded about some advice. I am offering you a response, pointing out that perhaps readers will misinterpret your intentions because of a lack of clarity. "bubbling up" is not a clear and concise description. So, asking me to believe what I want to believe is fine, but I beleive that this could be a better peom. Strive to go beyond the mediocre. give up some words.
on saving myself for marriage by Venus
20 Jun 2003, 5:42 AM
? I didn't know starfish ate cherries.
on I'm Not A Poet by JuddNelson
20 Jun 2003, 5:41 AM
Sonnets are a bitch. start with a rhyme scheme, abd go from there. check out www.sonnets.org
on Jesus was a necromancer by horus8
20 Jun 2003, 5:40 AM
I don't care that this is sacreligious, it is crap any way you look at it. nice job.
on Oh mother, thou art stoned! by <{Baba^Yaga}>
20 Jun 2003, 5:39 AM
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on Haiku: The Legend Continues by brazen
20 Jun 2003, 5:38 AM
T R I T E
on winter by w~* ATHENA *~w
20 Jun 2003, 5:36 AM
If you actually wrote this yourself, bravo. if not, then shame on you for defacating on art.
on Pointless tears by shwenatjadeflower
20 Jun 2003, 5:34 AM
strangely un-haiku like.
on Titanic by DespondentDotCom
20 Jun 2003, 5:33 AM
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are you counting the title as part of 17 syllables?
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are you counting the title as part of 17 syllables?
on when you want your haiku to be cool but otherwise got it trashed because you are f*#ing limited by 5-7-5...and you think you can get away with it but end up getting criticized in the web by unknown
20 Jun 2003, 5:32 AM
the limitations are what force the discipline and that is the essence of the Haiku form--beauty through discipline.
"sometimes an apparent constraint can serve to free the imagination" - Theodore Roethke
"sometimes an apparent constraint can serve to free the imagination" - Theodore Roethke
on Obsessions by Nicholas Jones
20 Jun 2003, 5:29 AM
I used to be in love with the trapezoid myself, until i discovered the tetrahedron.
on Greeny nature by chigurukala
20 Jun 2003, 5:20 AM
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mekka lekka hi mekka heiny ho.
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mekka lekka hi mekka heiny ho.
on Give me beer! by Agemo-Z
20 Jun 2003, 5:18 AM
DOes she look like your mom? If you are too drunk to tell, you probably don't want to bring that one home.
on Hot Potato by Shardik
20 Jun 2003, 5:14 AM
my neighbors are jews
a 5 syllable last line for you.
a 5 syllable last line for you.
on Advise by Audaciouslilgrl
13 Jun 2003, 9:09 AM
I have some advice for you. look at and rate a bunch more poems, learn a few things, read the "best" list and start over.
replying on Advise by Audaciouslilgrl
13 Jun 2003, 9:08 AM
ahh, the welcome wagon.