on some deleted poem
14 Oct 2003, 9:48 AM
screw it. I completely redid the whole thing.
on Jesus was a necromancer by horus8
20 Jun 2003, 5:40 AM
I don't care that this is sacreligious, it is crap any way you look at it. nice job.
on when you want your haiku to be cool but otherwise got it trashed because you are f*#ing limited by 5-7-5...and you think you can get away with it but end up getting criticized in the web by unknown
20 Jun 2003, 5:32 AM
the limitations are what force the discipline and that is the essence of the Haiku form--beauty through discipline.
"sometimes an apparent constraint can serve to free the imagination" - Theodore Roethke
"sometimes an apparent constraint can serve to free the imagination" - Theodore Roethke
on some deleted poem
19 Jun 2003, 10:56 AM
classifying this as "other" is fitting. it is something "other" than poetry. It is particularly trite and stolid...tired, unoriginal and horribly riddled with typos.
"standind right out
side my winow space."
you sound like a retard on drugs.
"standind right out
side my winow space."
you sound like a retard on drugs.
on Obsessions by Nicholas Jones
20 Jun 2003, 5:29 AM
I used to be in love with the trapezoid myself, until i discovered the tetrahedron.
on Pointless tears by shwenatjadeflower
20 Jun 2003, 5:34 AM
strangely un-haiku like.
on Oh mother, thou art stoned! by <{Baba^Yaga}>
20 Jun 2003, 5:39 AM
3
7
5
7
5
on saving myself for marriage by Venus
20 Jun 2003, 5:42 AM
? I didn't know starfish ate cherries.
on Hot Potato by Shardik
20 Jun 2003, 5:14 AM
my neighbors are jews
a 5 syllable last line for you.
a 5 syllable last line for you.
on Give me beer! by Agemo-Z
20 Jun 2003, 5:18 AM
DOes she look like your mom? If you are too drunk to tell, you probably don't want to bring that one home.
on Greeny nature by chigurukala
20 Jun 2003, 5:20 AM
5
6
3
mekka lekka hi mekka heiny ho.
6
3
mekka lekka hi mekka heiny ho.
on Titanic by DespondentDotCom
20 Jun 2003, 5:33 AM
4
8
3
are you counting the title as part of 17 syllables?
8
3
are you counting the title as part of 17 syllables?
on I'm Not A Poet by JuddNelson
20 Jun 2003, 5:41 AM
Sonnets are a bitch. start with a rhyme scheme, abd go from there. check out www.sonnets.org
on Advise by Audaciouslilgrl
13 Jun 2003, 9:09 AM
I have some advice for you. look at and rate a bunch more poems, learn a few things, read the "best" list and start over.
on Haiku: The Legend Continues by brazen
20 Jun 2003, 5:38 AM
T R I T E
on winter by w~* ATHENA *~w
20 Jun 2003, 5:36 AM
If you actually wrote this yourself, bravo. if not, then shame on you for defacating on art.
on some deleted poem
30 Sep 2003, 7:21 AM
check the inconsistent verb tenses - devours - receding
active to passive - I'm not exactly sure. but i know that recedes works better, and leaves you room for an adjective or other words in the last line.
active to passive - I'm not exactly sure. but i know that recedes works better, and leaves you room for an adjective or other words in the last line.
on Ferris Wheel by alverland theme park
30 Sep 2003, 7:22 AM
I like the simplicity.