on Iterated Fuck by nentwined
3 Mar 2003, 7:44 AM
all righty then.
on I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' by JakeBike
3 Mar 2003, 7:39 AM
extremely insightful. I read thousands of these types of poems, but just called them awful and trite.
on Tears For You by mckenzie
13 Mar 2003, 9:22 AM
craftless. try again.
on i said, he said by eyzwdeshut
3 Mar 2003, 7:53 AM
nice form, trite topic, but nice form. perhaps more precise images or specific details...
on outside my reach by eyzwdeshut
3 Mar 2003, 7:39 AM
read: I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' (by zero)
on some deleted poem
13 Mar 2003, 7:26 AM
Nicely Done
on some deleted poem
13 Mar 2003, 9:17 AM
interesting, but it doesn't quite hit it.
on The Kansas City Chiefs suck by Jeremi B. Handrinos
3 Mar 2003, 7:58 AM
lose comma after "city". lose second stanza.
on some deleted poem
3 Mar 2003, 7:56 AM
ack! a fork in the road? old old old. very blah and ordinary.
on One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined
3 Mar 2003, 7:42 AM
a good attempt. seems to miss saying something important.
on Perversions 5: Kink vs. Mothra by razorgrin
3 Mar 2003, 7:36 AM
odd. the words are interesting--but not rhythmically limericky.
on some deleted poem
3 Mar 2003, 7:34 AM
sounds like a best man speech. a pleasant tribute to a friend. appropriate in certain circumstances--perhaps a greeting card.
on some deleted poem
3 Mar 2003, 7:32 AM
I like it, but the first three lines could go. they are ambiguous.
on some deleted poem
3 Mar 2003, 5:41 AM
you don't need legs to dial 0. just a pink telephone--and not one of those hands-free models, either.
on For her he swam with sharks by Shardik
3 Mar 2003, 5:39 AM
I liked it all right. 8.
on The Flight of Childhood by Ellie95
3 Mar 2003, 5:37 AM
Certainly could have had more specific images and less superfluous words. has a certain "greeting card" quality that borders on stomach virus.
on Manifest Destiny by wordontheverge
5 Mar 2003, 9:57 AM
bravo, bravo. you should be proud of this. Can I use this in one of my classes? (I am a teacher)
on some deleted poem
3 Mar 2003, 7:55 AM
interesting descriptions. I enjoyed this.
on outside my reach by eyzwdeshut
3 Mar 2003, 7:40 AM
read: I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' (by zero)